poemranker ::20 most recent comments by rockinindividual (21-40) and replies

Comments byrockinindividual, 21–40 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on The Considerate Lover by Tascobar 25 Jan 2003, 1:21 PM
thats fucked up man
on Life's Unnoticables by apples_tim 25 Jan 2003, 1:18 PM
forseen is one word
on Best Friends by Chels85 25 Jan 2003, 1:17 PM
the rhyme scheme seems kind of forced...and then it doesnt match a real rhythm of any kind....4
on he was scared. by blurryphotograph 23 Jan 2003, 5:57 PM
you know i love this one too...but im giving you a 9 cause i just dont feel like giving it a 10
on Under a Streetlight in Paris by blurryphotograph 23 Jan 2003, 5:53 PM
you KNOW i love this poem...((even if i hated you id give it a 9)) mwahahahahahaha
i told you i loved this poem. its you, its totally you...and the ending is wonderful...10
on Turn your back by kliq 1 Jan 2003, 1:16 PM
its rhythm is somewhat messed up...makes reading it kind of jerky...4
on The Birds by lunar 1 Jan 2003, 1:15 PM
wow...its good...but its almost too subtle, i can't quite see the story, but i love what i see so far...7
on Confused by debased 1 Jan 2003, 1:13 PM
i like the repetition, would be awesome to hear somebody read this...8
on new year's eve by razorgrin 1 Jan 2003, 1:12 PM
yep...thats new years eve...WONDERFUL description...10
on would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil 31 Dec 2002, 7:48 AM
thats a very interesting idea...crazy...but i like it...9
on Found Lost by Carvaceous 31 Dec 2002, 7:45 AM
i love the images, and those last two lines end it perfectly...8
replying on im playing basketball by rockinindividual 28 Dec 2002, 6:36 AM
i am....so is carolinagirl...cause tar heels rock. i only watch womens basketball though. thats where you find the REAL talent.
replying on im playing basketball by rockinindividual 28 Dec 2002, 6:34 AM
mmmm...good idea...ill have to think about that
replying on im playing basketball by rockinindividual 27 Dec 2002, 8:02 PM
for me, this poem is supposed to be long, its supposed to capture the stages i went through when i played that night. i came out angry, i was playing because of the physical feeling of throwing a ball at something...i missed many times just because all i wanted was to throw something and hear a thud. eventually though, i began to think about what i was doing, i began to make the shots...to get good at it and to concentrate on what i was doing. it was at a point where i wasnt thinking about anything else...the only thing in my mind was where i should stand, how much force i should put into it, how much of an arc...and then i became tired and my shots werent making it and i was out of breath..but i wasnt angry anymore. i had forgotten it. thats what this poem is about, its supposed to be long, its supposed to perhaps be even longer than it could, and to be somewhat repetitive. thats what i had in mind when i wrote it. i do think it needs a simple rewrite, to cut back on a few things, but overall its trying to portray a certain idea, and in my mind it needs its length.
on Words by darkhelmet10 27 Dec 2002, 7:41 PM
4
on Surpass the Dream by darkhelmet10 27 Dec 2002, 7:40 PM
sweet but sappy...not my fave..but thats just my opinion...3
on Lasting Forever by angel_uy 27 Dec 2002, 7:39 PM
sweet but short...perhaps a little too...6
on Coloured waifs home by horus8 27 Dec 2002, 7:21 PM
5
on drum circle by <~> 27 Dec 2002, 7:17 PM
lovely..."cacophony then conceded, condensed, and coalesced
conjoined, as one voice made of many:
warp and weft, naive and deft,
high and low, fast and slow,
on it pulsed, out it flowed" <- great description....8