on Untitled by vulcan
2 Nov 2002, 9:54 AM
Gold of the underworld, do you mean "That the lovelorn shepherd lives"?
on An Exercise in Futility by loneshadow29
14 Nov 2002, 1:51 PM
Lnshdw, even this sort of poetry should probably steer clear of the word 'nothingness'. Makes me wonder why we don't have the word 'somethingness'.
on The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams by Caducus
14 Nov 2002, 2:01 PM
I like it, Cdcs. I would, however, like to see wenches associated with more positive elements than 'stench', perhaps 'wymyn's wenchly winsome wyles and wunnerful quenching...' something, something; they deserve it. Not sure about 'derelict peace'.
on Search of Love by loneshadow29
8 Nov 2002, 8:40 PM
Well, it's all about the search, now aint it?
on Necromantic Boo-boo by razorgrin
8 Nov 2002, 11:50 AM
"live and learn"...or die and dine; your choice, rzrgrn. I think it's hard to beat "Freaks" (1933?) for sheer skin-crawling revulsion inducement.
on some deleted poem
8 Nov 2002, 11:57 AM
Is it getting warm in here? Ya know, I read the title and I wondered, hmmm, what would Zzin write about as being 'Before Coffee'? Der lange Shlange.
on some deleted poem
6 Nov 2002, 8:41 AM
Tastee, TASTY; yum. Alright, I'm depressed because of yesterday's election results in this country, and, mostly, Sen. Wellstone's passing; but, quality poetry can always pick me up.
on A dutch poem (just a joke) by susie
6 Nov 2002, 8:26 AM
I'll guess that you deserve a 10; but, alas, I don't speak/read/write Dutch. Seems to rhyme. Methinks this the first completely foreign language poem on this site. I'll have to cook up one in German. Isn't Dutch just English and German thrown together?
on Dead Poets' Society (Joke) by Yardbird
6 Nov 2002, 6:36 AM
Yon Sir Yardbird, your deft wit is deliver-ed with panache and quick dispatch. Hurrah. No pissy little comments from me.
on Elegy for Lonnie Donegan by Nicholas Jones
6 Nov 2002, 6:31 AM
"Well, the Rock Island Line...". How many Brit and US musicians did Lonnie influence? Impossible to measure. A seminal artist in the history of RnR and folk rock. On this side of the pond, we just lost Adolph Green.
on .:|Mindfucked|:. by emman
5 Nov 2002, 1:17 PM
I'm curious about line two; Swedish? From this poem, I thought you were a male. "Just to seem more human" but, the result is seeming more like an emotionless automaton.
on Hells Game by Katie
5 Nov 2002, 1:25 PM
Strong writing, Katie; I think of two cowboys in a duel, gangs, etc. 'The anger is hereditary' makes me wonder. You gotta keep 'em separated; teufel hunde.
on some deleted poem
5 Nov 2002, 11:57 AM
I got inside a friend's Mini Cooper S, recently; no head room. The 'wickywackywa' is intrigueing; Knights of Ni, anyone?
on The Funnyman by Christof
2 Nov 2002, 9:49 AM
Haven't given a 9 in awhile. Reminds me of the line "squeezing out sparks" by Graham Parker. After reading this, I'm going to finally rent "Lenny" with Dustin Hoffman playing the role of the comedic genius Lenny Bruce.
on cool hand luke by royalflesh
31 Oct 2002, 10:29 PM
I like it; check your typos. Rolling Stone mag did a fascinatingly strange article on Hemingway and his very troubled son; I believe it was the August issue. My favorite line here is "and it is so much more....than destroyed". Keep fleshing, royally.
on Another Tragic Love Poem by greym0on
30 Oct 2002, 1:06 PM
Very strong, emotionally evocative. In stanza two, it reads awkwardly to end a line with "within" and start the next one with "in". Minor quibbles. "I'm sorry, is all that you can say..." --name that artist.
on some deleted poem
30 Oct 2002, 7:53 AM
"Little Sister don't you, LS don't you, LS don't you kiss me once or twice, say it's very nice..." but I digress. Plathensian.
on some deleted poem
30 Oct 2002, 7:51 AM
Somehow, the Billy Preston tune "nothing from nothing leaves nothing" fits in here. Rent the movie "Pi", baba.
on Her Name Is Stella by Tascobar
30 Oct 2002, 7:45 AM
I like Stella Artois, good beer. But, methinks Sierra Nevada Big Foot barleywine would cause a row and a ruction to begin.
on In the Quiet of the Night a Tree Gently Shakes by Nicholas Jones
30 Oct 2002, 7:48 AM
"light growing, streetlights ending"? Good haiku.