on Conjugate the verb by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
21 Jan 2005, 11:23 PM
Hows can you even consider this to be free verse. More like "other", or perhaps, Caged Verse. Either way, I thought it was crap. But eh? What do I know.
on The Poet's Plight by dougsoderstrom
10 Jan 2005, 10:32 AM
First verse, loved/magical things were expected, and then second and third were like I got shit on while pondering the beautiful imagine lain before.
on some deleted poem
8 Jan 2005, 6:50 PM
stunning
on some deleted poem
10 Jan 2005, 10:36 AM
We all tell ourselves that, but come on, the truth is written right in front of your face. Safety does not equal happy, much less love.
*Smiles, realizes who he is and that if anyone has no right to go into love speals, just sighs*
<3 Jason
*Smiles, realizes who he is and that if anyone has no right to go into love speals, just sighs*
<3 Jason
on The Wall is Crying by daggatolar
10 Jan 2005, 10:44 AM
Harsh on the thought required to so much as understand what the fuck your talking about. No Offense. Thought it was bad ass as far as Imagines, but I draw no real meaning out of this. -8- for now.
on some deleted poem
10 Jan 2005, 10:29 AM
Now thats, exactly how how it feels to be drowning in busy!
<3 Jason
<3 Jason
on some deleted poem
10 Jan 2005, 10:41 AM
Good Idea, but...
A) if your using Home as Heaven
A1)Figure should be more *Insert You Diety here*
A2)Go over the whole there may or may not have been footsteps left in the beach behind, and I may or may not have asked whose they where.
In other words sound like those Damn Things outside of Rest Rooms.
A) if your using Home as Heaven
A1)Figure should be more *Insert You Diety here*
A2)Go over the whole there may or may not have been footsteps left in the beach behind, and I may or may not have asked whose they where.
In other words sound like those Damn Things outside of Rest Rooms.
on some deleted poem
8 Jan 2005, 6:53 PM
This is sooooo... not a pimple
on War Story by dougsoderstrom
8 Jan 2005, 6:55 PM
Have you ever heard of the difference between a letter and a poem?
on War Story by dougsoderstrom
8 Jan 2005, 7:05 PM
"Moslem, becoming," just few typos, lots of forest gump rip offs, and a couple of rereads where spacing and metaphors, and spell check come into play
on Existential questions by kawakurdi
9 Jan 2005, 4:10 PM
Forced rhyme helps drive it well.
<3 Jason
<3 Jason
on Draw Me A Pretty Picture by cuddlytiger17
9 Jan 2005, 4:20 PM
Damn, what I wouldn't give for a drunken down on his luck suicidal wino right now, a crayon, and some extra copies of this this to draw on the back of in case he has a couple of buddies :0
In other words, very moving
<3 Jason
In other words, very moving
<3 Jason
on Poemranker I Couldn't stay Away by Tara57
10 Jan 2005, 6:27 PM
Wow, looks like you got hit by the harsher side of the ranker.
on In The Beginning by Dovina
16 Jan 2005, 1:38 AM
LOL
on some deleted poem
26 Jan 2005, 2:35 PM
Love it, I'd forgot I'd written it until you dug it up from my xanga. Now its the become a short story Idea. Thanks.
<3 Jason
<3 Jason
on Psalm of Wonder by Dovina
31 Jan 2005, 12:17 PM
I disagree. It does work on an emotional level.
on some deleted poem
31 Jan 2005, 12:10 PM
Inspiration can come from anything
Thrill, only because I'm always seeking
Movement occurs at the whimsy of wishful thinking
Motivation comes from your hearts desire
Touches can be terrible liars
Freedom is a tight rope balancing act, fun but scary
Comfort Lies within the company of smiles
Excited, I can it in your voice
Completely dazzling as I am stunning
Challenges of Art and Intellect are my day
Seeing is Believing that everyone has depths and shadows
Entertaining by fake smile over top of real grins
I want someone
Who isn't seeking passion
Brilliant Brightly Beaming
My Eyes Burn
Only to cool
Not Yet, Convince Me
<3 Jason
Thrill, only because I'm always seeking
Movement occurs at the whimsy of wishful thinking
Motivation comes from your hearts desire
Touches can be terrible liars
Freedom is a tight rope balancing act, fun but scary
Comfort Lies within the company of smiles
Excited, I can it in your voice
Completely dazzling as I am stunning
Challenges of Art and Intellect are my day
Seeing is Believing that everyone has depths and shadows
Entertaining by fake smile over top of real grins
I want someone
Who isn't seeking passion
Brilliant Brightly Beaming
My Eyes Burn
Only to cool
Not Yet, Convince Me
<3 Jason
on some deleted poem
3 Feb 2005, 6:32 PM
Well said
on Orion takes aim by oneglove
13 Feb 2005, 11:11 AM
Give him about 4 more months, he'll at least have it running south. -9-
on some deleted poem
19 Feb 2005, 1:52 AM
Improvement on the original by far.