| Re: she said by Bill Z Bub |
17-Feb-03/5:17 PM |
how quaint.
i give it an 8
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| Re: Quadroons by Shardik |
17-Feb-03/6:50 PM |
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mad applause for the 5th line
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25-Feb-03/1:11 PM |
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in the first verse i believe its "hung" not "hanged"
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| Re: Atonement by aperfecttool77 |
17-Feb-03/5:31 PM |
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this is terrible. let me give you a piece of advice my english teacher always told me: show me, don't tell me.
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| Re: Atonement by aperfecttool77 |
17-Feb-03/5:32 PM |
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i like your name tho by the way
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| Re: Unmasking Wyverns by horus8 |
15-Feb-03/11:10 PM |
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what an imagination you have
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| Re: Moon In My Blood by AtalantaPendragonne |
27-Feb-03/1:33 PM |
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when i read this it made me think back to biblical times in israel, in the time of leah and rachel and jacob and of how the women would save their blood, using it as libations. how when they bleed they'd stay seperate from men and those men would take a few wives, some concubines. well done.
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| Re: Stout Stick by Enki |
23-Feb-03/2:44 PM |
2 complaints.
1st i don't think you need to add a second "in the closet" in the first verse.
2nd the last line of the second verse is absolutely pathetic
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| Re: Happy Kid by ThoughtfulSoul |
17-Feb-03/5:26 PM |
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i would rather take a cheese grater to my face than read this
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17-Feb-03/6:54 PM |
this reminds me of my old style. it either has no point,
or the message is so obvious it could slap a 6 year old in the face
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17-Feb-03/6:58 PM |
the metaphorical quality is a joke.
you lose-3
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| Re: A Circle by Deb_djb3113 |
15-Feb-03/10:49 PM |
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what were you thinking when you posted this? wow it spins fast, you sure are deep.
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| Re: INDECENCY by TanHand |
16-Feb-03/3:17 PM |
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this makes me lose lose all power of speech. i don't even know where to start.
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| Re: I have nothing left to steal. by lost in america |
1-Mar-03/7:36 PM |
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kind of nice...a little sparse
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| Re: News Values (some time last November) by Nicholas Jones |
21-Feb-03/1:24 PM |
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i quite like this although i don't really think its a poem. maybe i only like it cuz i do the same thingwith the tv and the worrying and the fear and such
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| Re: terra incognita by horus8 |
15-Feb-03/11:00 PM |
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| Re: The Rooms by crownfox |
23-Feb-03/2:41 PM |
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mmmm i like it and i get the end but its a litle unclear and anonymous
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23-Feb-03/2:48 PM |
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