poemranker ::20 most recent comments by Nanshe (21-40) and replies

Comments byNanshe, 21–40 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on Oh boo by Modulo 11 Mar 2003, 9:37 PM
Please delte "to no end,". Thank you for flying with us.
on Goin? Down Baby by Drummer 11 Mar 2003, 9:33 PM
Angry young man meets question mark? Watch those apostrophes. They don't play nice when you cut and paste. Please fix. Namaste.
replying on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig 27 Feb 2003, 1:46 AM
You are most welcome.
on The darkest woods ever by Shardik 26 Feb 2003, 7:39 PM
Delightful.
on LifeArt by bunniesnangels 26 Feb 2003, 7:38 PM
Fail. Safe. Both.
Scourge.
replying on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig 26 Feb 2003, 6:44 PM
As for the poem, I suggest you invert the structure, so:

Wooden seahorses drown.
Icarus laughs at fallen skylarks
As Aeolus sighs.
replying on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig 26 Feb 2003, 6:37 PM
Yes, Besooted Fiend, but it Miraculous Healing Dogge Pooe, and with it, I Sight the Sightless, and Erect the Wheel-ed. (You won't be needing that Viagra anymore, Child.) Rise, Son! Cast aside thine round and tumbling Legge-Mockers! Stride! Gambol! Salsa, if you will! (I hear god'swife has a hell of a shimmy).

There. That was lovely.

I wonder if Lord Ganus has a recipe at the ready for Miraculous Dogge Pooe?
on Her bloody diamonds by Bachus 26 Feb 2003, 5:57 PM
A suggestion:
try and ease the connections between the lines. Make the rhythm more natural, easy, as spoken word. This is base carbon, and pressure must be applied; too much, and striations ruin the effect; too little, marcasite. You, sir, are a smooth-tongued devil. I sense it is not beyond your ken to make the needed modifications. I anticipate the boldness of the results. Accept this seven, for now. I assure you there is an eleven in hiding. Your task will be to draw it out.
on The Blooding by Mr Pig 26 Feb 2003, 5:53 PM
Black jelly on your tongue, indeed. Bravo.
replying on Ode to Chicken Kiev by bunniesnangels 26 Feb 2003, 5:44 PM
I see you have a fixation with the FAT. Perhaps you might reconsider your menu, before the gout sets in?
replying on THE POEMRANKER SEXCHART VERSION 1.2 FINAL by TanHand 26 Feb 2003, 5:42 PM
I can take care of that foryou, sugarhips, and no one need know. Unless, of course, you'd like the whole experiment videotaped, and posted on line. I asuure you that you would find my anatomy most delightfully interesting. Call me.
on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig 25 Feb 2003, 3:07 PM
Ah, Pig. I would like the chance to tweak this for you, but it needs a night in my unconscious. I shall sleep with it under my pillow, and, if you'll permit me, offer some words on the morrow.
replying on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig 25 Feb 2003, 3:06 PM
Because you are a font, and oracle, a connection to their lost, balanced divinity; you are a seductress and a nurturer and they would have to lay down their arms to lie in your arms. Their desire for you weakens and maddens them. The young ones see it and tease; the older ones are deliberately ogres to frighten and dominate through this fearful casting.
replying on We by Nanshe 25 Feb 2003, 7:21 AM
I will try this again, in sestina. I think it need more flesh, less sinewy twist. Thank you for the honesty of thine eyen.
replying on THE POEMRANKER SEXCHART VERSION 1.2 FINAL by TanHand 24 Feb 2003, 9:38 PM
Apparently, I am late to the orgy as well. But I have brought oysters and pomegranates.
on rhyming letter by bxjay170 24 Feb 2003, 9:34 PM
Forget the pass--tell her, and spare us.
on Ode to necrophilia by Bobjim 24 Feb 2003, 9:34 PM
Wouldn't that lead to coprophilia?
replying on We by Nanshe 24 Feb 2003, 9:29 PM
say it aloud; 'tis a pun
replying on He put a price on her head by Nanshe 24 Feb 2003, 5:14 PM
Many thanks, honollabre suhl.