on I'll Break You Down by Crakyamuni
18 Mar 2003, 5:56 PM
Corporate america sucks, of as horus would say laggniappe
on some deleted poem
18 Mar 2003, 12:12 PM
Nice visuals
on Green genius by INTRANSIT
18 Mar 2003, 5:41 PM
um..hmm
on some deleted poem
20 Mar 2003, 9:20 PM
Hey i tried to send a message to ya, but it didnt work do u have a new email
on I'll Break You Down by Crakyamuni
18 Mar 2003, 5:57 PM
Crap i meant "or as"i always do that
on While flipping over stones by <{Baba^Yaga}>
17 Mar 2003, 4:10 PM
I like it
on some deleted poem
17 Mar 2003, 4:12 PM
very cool, i thought that haiku was a 5-7-5 thing. Someone tell if I am mistaken.
on lost by elizabethann
17 Mar 2003, 4:13 PM
Not sure what u mean
on Horse meat & pistols by <{Baba^Yaga}>
18 Mar 2003, 5:19 PM
Strange and obscene
on some deleted poem
18 Mar 2003, 5:39 PM
Can the author tell me how this makes sense
on some deleted poem
18 Mar 2003, 5:15 PM
Hmmm
on some deleted poem
20 Mar 2003, 8:56 PM
well i think you just got caught writing a dumb poem, im not trying to be mean i just dont like it and i think if you try harder you could turn this concept into somthing good.
on some deleted poem
20 Mar 2003, 9:01 PM
Now this is an actual poem, while it might not be the best its a good start, i myself am not even that great but the suggestions and comments from this site have showed me how crappy i am and how much further i need to go
on some deleted poem
20 Mar 2003, 9:02 PM
I think you smoked some bad granola
on iodine and baby oil by rockinindividual
18 Mar 2003, 5:30 PM
The whole baby oil thing sounds a little wierd but works. Could have used a little more backround on the charecter maybe
on Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8
18 Mar 2003, 5:48 PM
This poem reminds me of a Project 86 song in the way it is put together. Nice job horus, whats with the 8 in your name anyways?
on Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8
18 Mar 2003, 5:51 PM
Here it is,
Submerged in endless (trailing off)
I watch them fade by (sigh)
Lifeless and Stone-faced (paining on)
I see...
The face I use to be
They want to feel this (straining on)
They want to sense this (now)
Drunk with existence (waking me)
I'll show you something (someone) you can feel
Submerged in endless (trailing off)
I watch them fade by (sigh)
Lifeless and Stone-faced (paining on)
I see...
The face I use to be
They want to feel this (straining on)
They want to sense this (now)
Drunk with existence (waking me)
I'll show you something (someone) you can feel
on Unmasking Wyverns by horus8
18 Mar 2003, 12:15 PM
Cool
on some deleted poem
20 Mar 2003, 8:58 PM
this isnt even a poem, its like your telling your friends at school what you did friday night.
on A Face Of Sadness by mr_ice55
18 Mar 2003, 2:02 PM
Awesome, could be better if u dropped the last para tho. And changed "pillow" to somthing else