on The Glint by peaceseeker
9 Dec 2003, 10:37 AM
Except for a couple of light redundancies, I liked the message but got tangled in the flow. Maybe I should've had my coffee first.
on some deleted poem
12 Dec 2003, 3:21 PM
I like it, but, why is Jesu your only salvation, or abysmal help?
Some consider Lucifer to be the Guiding Light. Once embraced - one sees the Light, the Path from the abyss.
Interesting context indeed.
Some consider Lucifer to be the Guiding Light. Once embraced - one sees the Light, the Path from the abyss.
Interesting context indeed.
on The man of steel by <{Baba^Yaga}>
12 Dec 2003, 3:28 PM
Mmmmm.... "Mutton Biceps". You're chasing that with whine I hope.
on My Friend? by Blade
30 Jun 2004, 10:14 AM
Hmmmmmm... It would make more sense to me if it were "by barstools that have Gone-awry-a." They have no clout whatsoever.
on Blobby song$ by MR Blobby
30 Jun 2004, 10:25 AM
Damn! All I see is a blob upon my sheetmusic! I had a playfully good time trying to put a tune to this, but alas, blobby blob, blobby blob, I lacked the syncopation. It's nice to know you're loved though.
on "She Phoned This Morning" by ARTIE
21 Jun 2004, 3:04 PM
"doth", "do'eth", "does"; I chose "doth" just because...er...well... I used to read a lot of Shakespeare's sonnets. Ok, maybe it is a little out of date. Thanks for your inputs.
This will be a work in progress as I really liked the way this first stanza turned out. I'll have her call again soon and inspire me toward more.
Stay tuned.....
This will be a work in progress as I really liked the way this first stanza turned out. I'll have her call again soon and inspire me toward more.
Stay tuned.....
on some deleted poem
21 Jun 2004, 3:12 PM
Schizopoda or Macuran, touche! never the less. One of your best.
on The Freemasons by Bachus
17 Jun 2004, 10:14 PM
Ever read "Sarum" by Edward Rutherfurd? Those [eventual] Masons "Rocked" the free World to come. Satan and Pagan ruled for centuries. Embrace an Icon??? Stonehenge is offlimits now.
on West Coast Epilogue (Pseudo Triolet) by wilco
17 Jun 2004, 10:23 PM
Wuz "you" really right..??..even if you'd never been to Calif?
No sand in your shorts? I was enthralled by the West Coast promenade many years ago, but, I had no right to stay. Good vote to you.
No sand in your shorts? I was enthralled by the West Coast promenade many years ago, but, I had no right to stay. Good vote to you.
on Twilight Affair by thepinkbunnyofdoom
31 Mar 2011, 7:56 PM
A little "wordy" and somewhat essential and intrinsic. However, it works in a diminished cerebral way. 8-9 score
on Dance Of Insanity by forsaken
31 Mar 2011, 8:01 PM
Have you grown up dreaming of a disenfranchised Jeffrey Dahmer? He's dead.
Come back.... come back to the World in which the rest of us live. Sanity is knot a b-b-bad thing.
Come back.... come back to the World in which the rest of us live. Sanity is knot a b-b-bad thing.
on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
31 Mar 2011, 8:30 PM
There once was a poett named D'Angel
Whose words try to be quite playful
He'll work up a rhyme
tho' he'll often commit grime
'cause to others he's often quite hateful.
Whose words try to be quite playful
He'll work up a rhyme
tho' he'll often commit grime
'cause to others he's often quite hateful.
on FHjk by Dark Angle
31 Mar 2011, 8:42 PM
There once was a man named d-Angle
whose dick couldn't find a quadrangle
he'd pop a blue pill
which made him quite ill
but his mum was left quite tranquil
whose dick couldn't find a quadrangle
he'd pop a blue pill
which made him quite ill
but his mum was left quite tranquil
on Two More Cunts Who Are One Cunt by mr cunt
31 Mar 2011, 8:46 PM
Stunt.... Stunk.... Stunts
Wholly fun-k "Fat-Man"
Wholly fun-k "Fat-Man"
on Journey To The Centre Of The Loom by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
31 Mar 2011, 8:50 PM
3rd stanza is somewhat weak but overall this is very good..... "return to tend the gloom"
on She Dreams of Yesterday by Phalkon
28 Oct 2014, 1:07 PM
She dreams of yesterday - because now that she has opened her mind to the reality of despair, she harkens back upon a simpler time.
on Hey by impert&ent
28 Oct 2014, 1:30 PM
When lit only by a fading memory, it's the sleeping neurons that require enlight-&-ment.
on It snows in July by daniella
2 Jan 2015, 3:04 PM
hair weeping.... brain thinking because the night sky was weeping into your hair... Now I am weeping and the tears are seeping but I gotta stop to wipe my nose - Overall I like it - 7.5
on it is my turn this season by daniella
2 Jan 2015, 3:12 PM
If your heart beats fire beneath another and then you ride him into the ocean... did you switch places?
Overall I liked it. reminds me that there is another lobe to the brain - not left nor right but from the "light side" of the brain.
Gotta check out Daphne's website...
Overall I liked it. reminds me that there is another lobe to the brain - not left nor right but from the "light side" of the brain.
Gotta check out Daphne's website...
on Hobo. by SupremeDreamer
7 Apr 2015, 8:03 PM
Fuck you who looks down on me--
when Rome falls, you'll be fucked
while I'll finally be set free.
Set your own fucking condescending self free. Vulgarity obviously hasn't worked. Look around and realize, you shackle yourself.
when Rome falls, you'll be fucked
while I'll finally be set free.
Set your own fucking condescending self free. Vulgarity obviously hasn't worked. Look around and realize, you shackle yourself.