on Where Beauty Goes by jhackman
3 Dec 2002, 11:48 PM
hold a rose while you may. the memory damns me.
on some deleted poem
4 Dec 2002, 10:30 PM
focus.
on There is no Happy Hour in Bakersfield, Ca. by horus8
3 Dec 2002, 8:43 AM
excellent.
on Superhuman - Nature - Hero by royalflesh
3 Dec 2002, 10:34 AM
please fix the ???'s. and pick me up at 7. eight's too long a wait, love.
on some deleted poem
4 Dec 2002, 10:41 PM
tell me the first stanza in different words?
on Rich and the wall by INTRANSIT
3 Dec 2002, 11:49 PM
watch out for spiders. their bites do itch.
on some deleted poem
4 Dec 2002, 10:33 PM
i like the way i feel like a voyeur watching them, and then they are the true voyeurs. but this needs more knitting, more flesh, if only to be later denied.
on some deleted poem
4 Dec 2002, 10:35 PM
unfortunate, the conflict of bellowing and whispering. the connotation makes her seem insane, when she is mad with grief. you do not convince me of anything here. sorry.
on some deleted poem
4 Dec 2002, 10:38 PM
there are too many sounds here, without a flow. love is hardly ever staccato, and loss is never so. match the tone of the words to the jist of the message. you are at odds with yourself in here. you have re-written this several times already haven't you?
on The Rebel by Nicholas Jones
4 Dec 2002, 10:48 PM
can i milk her while she watches you write?
on Allegheny Winter Lament by jdsnyd
3 Dec 2002, 11:49 PM
why so unsettled? why the jags? winter smoothes, buries all in its bitter greyed skin.
on she said by Bill Z Bub
3 Dec 2002, 11:24 PM
i like it. i like the title, although if you must change it, i suggest "she said".
on The futillity of charity. by darby pyn
3 Dec 2002, 11:26 PM
but this is not tailored. nor is it off the rack. this is a find. show it off.
on some deleted poem
3 Dec 2002, 12:44 PM
ah, the power of cheese
on some deleted poem
3 Dec 2002, 8:49 AM
ha! nice job.
on HATTIE by Nicholas Monson
3 Dec 2002, 10:16 AM
nice job.
on Beliefs? by RWAndersen
3 Dec 2002, 10:18 AM
typo
on the rose by keatsImnot
4 Dec 2002, 8:04 AM
nicely done.
on some deleted poem
3 Dec 2002, 10:37 AM
much, much better now.
i still wonder why you use so.many.periods.?
i still wonder why you use so.many.periods.?
on some deleted poem
4 Dec 2002, 9:24 AM
aw, snap. all done, NJ.