replying on walk out by NNirvana13666
22 Aug 2003, 10:46 AM
13666--yeah there's a lot of crap here. just like everywhere. and there's good stuff too. as for yours being good? i'd call it self-servingly nascent.
replying on fragile by Bill Z Bub
21 Aug 2003, 8:34 PM
weird. get k on it. although he ain't been round much, lately.
replying on Camera Obscura by Fear of Garbage
21 Aug 2003, 8:05 PM
because your work consists of acute observation and introversion, sans emotion.
it is not clear at all that you are a chick. you're not posting chick poems. you're not showing any softened edges. the words you post are meticulous. genderless. human.
it is not clear at all that you are a chick. you're not posting chick poems. you're not showing any softened edges. the words you post are meticulous. genderless. human.
replying on fragile by Bill Z Bub
21 Aug 2003, 7:56 PM
cheddar is the single most popular cheese in the world, bub.
on fragile by Bill Z Bub
21 Aug 2003, 7:55 PM
singular or plural: decide.
"to be opened"--superfluous. can it. and "now"--nix that 2.
do a little more with the last line--maybe 'tumbke into your sheets'. it's there, waiting for you--go on, man! write the bastard down!
"to be opened"--superfluous. can it. and "now"--nix that 2.
do a little more with the last line--maybe 'tumbke into your sheets'. it's there, waiting for you--go on, man! write the bastard down!
on A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer
21 Aug 2003, 7:52 PM
this would benefit from the use of one or more poetic devices.
on A Manifesto on Murder by Jeremi B. Handrinos
21 Aug 2003, 7:51 PM
surface snatching the cervix, as fee for service.
on When He's In Me by J.B. Manning
21 Aug 2003, 7:03 PM
nice build-up. i especially like "sweat so sweet that sour seems discreet".
typo: steel, not steal, right?
also: "Pain
Sparks
In my mind
Lightly slightly
Stimulates
And separates
Us from them"
who is us and who is them? gay/straight? something else? maybe it doesn't need to be explained, because this is about the heat, and i'm not wearing my inflammable cat suit tonight.
oh well.
typo: steel, not steal, right?
also: "Pain
Sparks
In my mind
Lightly slightly
Stimulates
And separates
Us from them"
who is us and who is them? gay/straight? something else? maybe it doesn't need to be explained, because this is about the heat, and i'm not wearing my inflammable cat suit tonight.
oh well.
replying on quarter-step (abridged) by richa
21 Aug 2003, 12:20 PM
okay, this is much better now.
but can you give me a hint as to why you would prefer a march to a waltz?? perhaps, in the title? is it a parting of way?
but can you give me a hint as to why you would prefer a march to a waltz?? perhaps, in the title? is it a parting of way?
on trying to cross the border to Sweetgrass by Patsy
21 Aug 2003, 10:33 AM
i do not understand your line breaks.
on not titled by coolassbob
21 Aug 2003, 7:27 AM
shall i call you ismael?
i think you mean subscribe:
I do not _subscribe_ to a strict code of ethics.
i think you mean subscribe:
I do not _subscribe_ to a strict code of ethics.
on stop poking me georges seurat by coolassbob
21 Aug 2003, 7:25 AM
i'll bet georges liked his peas.
i wonder what he drank?
i wonder what he drank?
on A Mod Proposal (of Modest Proportions) by coolassbob
21 Aug 2003, 7:24 AM
funny. but i dinna see a proposal herein.
replying on quarter-step (abridged) by richa
21 Aug 2003, 7:16 AM
i am selfishly voracious when it comes to words.
and i know what it feels like to think i am being clear in my writing, only to see, later, that i was too far inside the idea to communicate it effectively.
i just like calling YOU out, dreamer.
and i know what it feels like to think i am being clear in my writing, only to see, later, that i was too far inside the idea to communicate it effectively.
i just like calling YOU out, dreamer.
replying on quarter-step (abridged) by richa
21 Aug 2003, 6:52 AM
where is the correlation between the 1/4 step and the earthwork?
more than selfishness, here. personal taste in music, aesthetism, and utility explain these creations. and the question asked here, rhetorically, is will you dine with me.
i misunderstand how any of these things can be selfish, richard.
unless you mean to say that we have no right to shape anything.
we are animals richard; survival and prosperity are different than self-gratification.
please explain what you meant, again. i'm feeling particularly dense this morning.
more than selfishness, here. personal taste in music, aesthetism, and utility explain these creations. and the question asked here, rhetorically, is will you dine with me.
i misunderstand how any of these things can be selfish, richard.
unless you mean to say that we have no right to shape anything.
we are animals richard; survival and prosperity are different than self-gratification.
please explain what you meant, again. i'm feeling particularly dense this morning.
replying on Thorns by poetandknowit
20 Aug 2003, 12:46 PM
pig--are you cad? or are you just signed in as laurence?
don't fuck with me. i am an advocate.
don't fuck with me. i am an advocate.
Plastination: fantastic. wish it would come here.
Are you liking the new rankers?: a few could use a good flaying.
What is your favorite ranker?: p&k
What is yout favorite smelling ranker?: settle.
Which ranker has the nicest eyes?: you, wingy d.
Which ranker has the nicest personality?: i could not say. i don not care for nice personalities.
(and where do they keep it?): again, i have never sought such a thing, and so find myself unqualified to answer.
Where may i find lovely young rankers?: there are none, of late. supreme dreamer may give you a meaty fight. pinkbunny is a rather amusing young dunce who has a very high opinion of himself. he even posted his blog address. it makes for middling entertainment, when insomnia strikes. hard.
I have many more questions but i fear you would not aanswer them: you are so wrong. i will do my best to answer anything you ask, good sir.
just one more?: as many as you please. the workload is light today.
What is xo?: a shorthand closure, implying affection
and how does punctuation work?: you know better than that.
Are you liking the new rankers?: a few could use a good flaying.
What is your favorite ranker?: p&k
What is yout favorite smelling ranker?: settle.
Which ranker has the nicest eyes?: you, wingy d.
Which ranker has the nicest personality?: i could not say. i don not care for nice personalities.
(and where do they keep it?): again, i have never sought such a thing, and so find myself unqualified to answer.
Where may i find lovely young rankers?: there are none, of late. supreme dreamer may give you a meaty fight. pinkbunny is a rather amusing young dunce who has a very high opinion of himself. he even posted his blog address. it makes for middling entertainment, when insomnia strikes. hard.
I have many more questions but i fear you would not aanswer them: you are so wrong. i will do my best to answer anything you ask, good sir.
just one more?: as many as you please. the workload is light today.
What is xo?: a shorthand closure, implying affection
and how does punctuation work?: you know better than that.
replying on Stargazing Illusionist by DreamerSupreme
20 Aug 2003, 9:22 AM
lee? not too long--just done to death before. you are getting la-zeee.
replying on Wha you funkin wan? by ==Doylum
20 Aug 2003, 9:19 AM
you mistake my intent, sirrah. it is not flirting, it is smug flippancy. at least according to margaret, and she is a FEATURED POET.
it is an entertaing poem, but i would rather hear about the anthropomorphized bacon.
it is an entertaing poem, but i would rather hear about the anthropomorphized bacon.
on Wha you funkin wan? by ==Doylum
20 Aug 2003, 9:08 AM
bah. away so long, and this is your triumphant return? BAH!