on The Guardian, page nineteen by Nicholas Jones
4 Mar 2003, 10:48 AM
nice one.
why not "life and death--same page"
for proper syllabel count? why break form, without purpose?
why not "life and death--same page"
for proper syllabel count? why break form, without purpose?
replying on Cannibalism by Enki
4 Mar 2003, 10:46 AM
wow yer kewl.
was it lean, or did it make you FAT?
was it lean, or did it make you FAT?
on Let Me In (I need some chaps) by TanHand
4 Mar 2003, 10:44 AM
explain, please.
is this a fetish of yours? won't you let me in? (i'm not a chap. erg.)
is this a fetish of yours? won't you let me in? (i'm not a chap. erg.)
replying on I love your pink little bow by <{Baba^Yaga}>
4 Mar 2003, 10:17 AM
introspection is a wellspring here, sirrah.
replying on G-Spot Blues. by spank me baby yeah
4 Mar 2003, 10:16 AM
howz about a tip for us girls with a limited sexual palette?
you're an omnivore, sweet man. have you tips for the ladies who prefer men?
you're an omnivore, sweet man. have you tips for the ladies who prefer men?
replying on wandering, north by <~>
4 Mar 2003, 9:54 AM
have you heard of near rhymes, goldfinger? perfect rhyming would have made this more trite, a line it thinly treads now. but has a beat, and you can sure as hell dance to it. and it sticks in your craw, tan one.
it is the way it is because it has a target. it hit that target, dead center. see caducus's comment for confirmation of this.
as an advertising design student, you should realize by now that it doesn't matter if it's perfect, or even if it's good; you--as it's creator--might even think it sucks. what matters is that your client blows his load when he sees it.
and then writes the check.
the money's in the bank. the client's happy.
there are plenty of other poems that i wrote for myself on this site, and there are a few more in the notebook that i need to hit with the chisel before i post them here. rank me on those, monkey boy.
it is the way it is because it has a target. it hit that target, dead center. see caducus's comment for confirmation of this.
as an advertising design student, you should realize by now that it doesn't matter if it's perfect, or even if it's good; you--as it's creator--might even think it sucks. what matters is that your client blows his load when he sees it.
and then writes the check.
the money's in the bank. the client's happy.
there are plenty of other poems that i wrote for myself on this site, and there are a few more in the notebook that i need to hit with the chisel before i post them here. rank me on those, monkey boy.
replying on wandering, north by <~>
4 Mar 2003, 9:47 AM
why would you like it present tense? the slide is finished. there's no ebb and flow--he's slid.
is this what you mean?
is this what you mean?
replying on balthazar by UnityMitford
28 Feb 2003, 12:44 PM
HEY!!! you promised that that would be "our little secret"!
you big jerk!!
(heheheh! i made a pun.)
you big jerk!!
(heheheh! i made a pun.)
on balthazar by UnityMitford
28 Feb 2003, 11:17 AM
well, my old pal, i see what you are saying here, and i'll not lend you my box matches, nor let you siphon my gasoline!!! i may need them myself, and nothing makes me happier than a gigantic FIRE!!!!!
replying on UltraSound by UnityMitford
28 Feb 2003, 11:14 AM
yah, okay, fine. you make me wet. there.
replying on On coming across a field of deer one afternoon by <~>
27 Feb 2003, 6:58 AM
i came, not the deer, dear. syntax and you should get to know each other a little better. maybe over a couple of beers. or a rack.
on Harry Potter and the philosophers stone by ==Doylum
26 Feb 2003, 8:40 PM
my cup runneth. over.
on Weep for Dead Heroes by Tascobar
26 Feb 2003, 8:39 PM
ew.
on Whales by Jeremi B. Handrinos
26 Feb 2003, 8:39 PM
S3 is way out of place, h.
on Dolly was a damn fine lamb by <{Baba^Yaga}>
26 Feb 2003, 8:38 PM
bleats. baa. baa. bah!
on Resurrection (for Gods Wife) by Mr Pig
26 Feb 2003, 8:37 PM
lowercase s in shelters, please.
line "Cocks are so ugly," is unnecsessary; explicate instead of tell.
first few lines--metaphor is outstanding.