poemranker ::20 most recent comments by <~> (701-720) and replies

Comments by<~>, 701–720 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on Crucifixion by Mr Pig 26 Feb 2003, 8:37 PM
two nits:
wine saturated the sponge;
you seem to be implying that judas dined on holy bread that evening.
on I did not have sexual relations with that woman by scitz 26 Feb 2003, 8:34 PM
sure.
replying on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig 25 Feb 2003, 9:22 PM
you're just saying that because you're greek, freak.

oh, and, i'd like to take this opportunity to say "oracular" syllabically in fibonacci sequence, for 10 progressions or so:

( )
or
ac
ular
oracu
laroracular
oracularoracular
oracularoracularoracu
laroracularoracularoracularoracularoracular
oracularoracularoracularoracularoracularoracularoracularoracularoral

(oops. i went a little darwinian on yer asses there.)
replying on rememberance of things past by keatsImnot 19 Feb 2003, 4:43 PM
dammit! he's NOT keats--he's PROUST!!!! trying to throw us rankers off the scent with a little misspelling, eh, monsieur?

well, it won't work!
replying on Weekend at the Taj by <~> 19 Feb 2003, 12:32 PM
will you ride the drop with me atop the stratoshere?
replying on Weekend at the Taj by <~> 19 Feb 2003, 11:52 AM
ooh. i missed a stanza anyway.
replying on Weekend at the Taj by <~> 19 Feb 2003, 10:39 AM
it's the seedy las vegas of the east, located in south jersey. nope, not a good place to get stuck.
on Lovers leave their marks by scitz 19 Feb 2003, 7:09 AM
scitz this could be quite good but you've got far too many words tumbling around in this sack. this needs a bit of meter to bounce the reader on through. smooth it out a bit, and it will be lovely.

(for help with meter, see:
http://www.uni.edu/english/craft/line&amp;meter.html
and
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/general/gl_soundmeter.html
on Perversions 6: Judgement Day by razorgrin 19 Feb 2003, 6:36 AM
oh shit!!!!
razor, razor, razor! you have outdone yourself.

thanks for making my morning!
on Iterated Fuck by nentwined 18 Feb 2003, 9:23 PM
shit. i'll say. wow. that's a departure for you. a relase. or two. or 3. yessir. yes indeedy. needy.

i just wished you had eased me into it more with some foreplay, instead of thrusting deftly from the outset.


replying on April Showers by mindsigns 18 Feb 2003, 7:36 PM
chinese cold tea?

blue laws in california?

wtf
on stars of wonder by rompingcat 18 Feb 2003, 3:31 PM
star of wonder, star of night, star with royal beauty bright, westward leading, still proceeding....
on The Blooding by Mr Pig 18 Feb 2003, 3:30 PM
things i like:
cut glass accents
wilder than a foxglove
vivisected sky
disappointemnt like a late picasso

thing i don't:
"always" 2 lines in a row

please explain because i don't understand this line:
Blurred in salt tears that burned the foxes blood,
on she said by Bill Z Bub 18 Feb 2003, 3:26 PM
nice and tight, now. goodjob.
on The Poet by muffin 18 Feb 2003, 12:35 PM
part of me wants to tell you to write about your observations instead of you imaginings, but then there's another part of me that thinks you maybe should get it all out in a journal first, and then maybe go read some literature, and then some literary criticism (www.poets.org is a good source) and then, after aeons of study, and a cathartic dawn of comprehension, then, and only then, should you re-endeavor to write an poeme. and another part of me thinks i should go bowling. who will win? i dunno.
on Atonement by aperfecttool77 18 Feb 2003, 12:31 PM
i'm sorry i read this poem.
on Death Of Day ( re-edit) by Mr Pig 16 Feb 2003, 7:51 AM
howl!

bravo.
on Spider Spider (A Parody in Form) by Blue Magpie 15 Feb 2003, 10:46 PM
yes. nicely woven. "mite" should be "might" in S1, otherwise, very pleasing.
replying on Meditation 01 by Blue Magpie 15 Feb 2003, 10:45 PM
grease up your feet, and get your facts straight, if you are going to anthropomorphize. male lions attack their cubs. etc.
on Confusion by bsjones84 15 Feb 2003, 10:35 AM
bsjones84, thank you for commentng on my poem. i am sorry you found it vulgar, and, to be quite honest, i wondered about the poem's vulgarity after you made that remark. then i went back and read it. then i read your poems. and i realized that you have very little grasp of the use of metaphor as a poetic device, and therefore, you would naturally find my writing vulgar. i invite you to reread the poem, with the understanding that there is no sex happening in that particular poem. instead, i am using the excitement one feels at the promise of imminent copulation as a device to describe the excitement that words give to me, and to him. thank you for your time, pilgrim.

p.s. i have plenty of poems where sex actually does happen, and they are far from vulgar in their descriptiveness, if that's what you're looking for. words ezxcite me. what can i say?