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Comments bynentwined, the 20 most recent, including replies. Only comments on poems

on Getting Ahead by Jill Stockinger 22 Jan 2021, 5:15 PM
love it :)
replying on the product of repetition by nentwined 30 Dec 2020, 11:55 AM
Yeah, the lack of specificity in the poem makes it not stick to the wall quite as well, asking the reader to fill that in/explore.

All or any of the above.
on the product of repetition by nentwined 29 Dec 2020, 11:52 AM
https://madewithcollab.com/collab/W00k80w00h1
replying on Nadine by nentwined 16 Dec 2020, 7:21 PM
This may be the alcohol speaking (reasons) but thank you. I love your poetry group, and thank you. :)
replying on paint me a poem (try 2) by nentwined 16 Dec 2020, 3:15 PM
Revisiting to try a new thing. Reading it out, I stumbled in a few places. Also adjusting for timing... Do I edit this into oblivion or make a v3 that is its own thing?

===

paint me a picture with countable stanzas,
colors that rhyme directly and slant,
paint me the lines that twist their own language,
that form a new form when rendered as chant,
paint me a picture that makes its own being,
make it sing loudly the chords of the soul
and paint it again, and again, and again.

===

https://www.facebook.com/kaolinfire/posts/10158680724377199
replying on Nadine by nentwined 16 Dec 2020, 3:01 PM
Not wrong at all, gone too soon.
on Sunrise at McDonalds by Dovina 4 Dec 2020, 4:13 PM
Feels a little clipped to me in places (first two lines set a cadence for me that I then trip on line three).

I like the second view, definitely think it adds something. Though perhaps it would be less on the nose using the word "palm"?
on for John by pete 3 Dec 2020, 3:34 PM
I kind of want to hear this out loud, ranted on stage, maybe with some jazz behind it. I don't know how well it holds up for me for re-reading, I don't feel like it "wraps up" for me? but maybe it doesn't need to. I really want it to wrap up more, though.
on Sea Foam by groogirl 2 Dec 2020, 2:34 PM
Are you the sea foam? Can that be merged with the jester? I don't feel the mixing of metaphors as they stand, but maybe that could be embraced more somehow?
replying on Due by impert&ent 2 Dec 2020, 2:07 PM
Just repaired comment-emails (who knows when they broke?), so that may help some small amount.
replying on I'll start by nentwined 2 Dec 2020, 10:27 AM
Maybe fixed?

https://stackoverflow.com/questions/8186395/noclassdeffounderror-javax-activation-datasource

javax.activation was removed from Java9 forwards, so I had to include it manually.
replying on I'll start by nentwined 2 Dec 2020, 10:21 AM
ARGH. Yes. Yes, right.
replying on Fragmental by Bill Z Bub 11 Nov 2020, 3:26 PM
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... 32 more
on Fragmental by Bill Z Bub 11 Nov 2020, 3:25 PM
well that's a new error
on Fragmental by Bill Z Bub 11 Nov 2020, 3:25 PM
*hugs* here and there and anywhere.
replying on Days of Silence (1-196) by impert&ent 11 Nov 2020, 3:23 PM
O_O
on Lovesick by impert&ent 11 Nov 2020, 3:22 PM
Hah, yes.
on Firewoman by Richard 11 Nov 2020, 3:22 PM
Too much cliche in word choice makes it hard for me to involve myself in reading the poem. I believe there's a lot of emotion in this, but it doesn't translate/transfer to me.
on Due by impert&ent 11 Nov 2020, 3:20 PM
I may just be out of practice, but I love this.
on Life in the Z-Zone by T. Jonathron Remp 23 Apr 2020, 3:24 PM
Torn between 6 and 2. Going with 2.