on coming out by pete
23 Apr 2020, 3:23 PM
cute :)
on Everybody's Gone by impert&ent
23 Apr 2020, 3:21 PM
damn. nailed it for me right now.
on Lazy Pindaric Ode Blues by pete
23 Apr 2020, 3:19 PM
definitely spoken.
replying on A terzanelle on the subject of the moment by Adriaan
23 Apr 2020, 3:10 PM
^this :)
replying on protest chant by nypoet22
23 Apr 2020, 3:09 PM
Just make sure all food is well cooked! ;) [I only darkly jest]
Interestingly, ... corporations /are/ dying of the plague....
Interestingly, ... corporations /are/ dying of the plague....
on Year of the Cucumber by Dovina
23 Apr 2020, 3:07 PM
I stumbled a little at "feel"/"feel with"... flows better without to me. (why wallah vs. voila? If you were a cucumber? :) )
"no wanderlust" might be "no lust for wander"?
More food for thought than I expected.
"no wanderlust" might be "no lust for wander"?
More food for thought than I expected.
on Weather poem 13b by nypoet22
23 Apr 2020, 2:59 PM
I sure don't know. 13b?
replying on Bill of Rights on A4 by T. Jonathron Remp
1 Nov 2017, 10:51 AM
I love you. :)
replying on Bill of Rights on A4 by T. Jonathron Remp
1 Nov 2017, 10:36 AM
It's a failure of the poem or myself, I don't care which. For me, this critique.
on Sense {non} by Skamper
30 Jan 2015, 1:39 PM
the second stanza is your poem. drop the rest. maybe explore that more, or maybe don't. 6 for the poem as whole.
on The Spell(Alice part I) by alvinb
30 Jan 2015, 1:36 PM
I really like the potential of the first two stanzas, but the rest disappoints, for me—give me more color, more shifting, more playing with vision (other than bright/dark). Though loss poems are particularly hard to do, in that the general doesn't connect and the particular may be too particular. And they are done, and done, and done--but try to dig into more senses, cohere it all, and don't give up....
on Some of us by daniella
30 Jan 2015, 1:31 PM
cute :)
on Untitled Future by ARTIE
30 Jan 2015, 1:30 PM
I like how it leaves me hanging, but that's all that strikes me....
on Pakistan school massacre by Dhanesh M Kumar
30 Jan 2015, 1:30 PM
some nice images (or well-coined/well-conveyed), but doesn't really work for me as a poem.
on Bill of Rights on A4 by T. Jonathron Remp
30 Jan 2015, 1:28 PM
not following...nice flow/sounds.
on A mag that PAYS??? by SupremeDreamer
30 Jan 2015, 1:27 PM
It paid semi-pro rates regardless; the "if it sells" was the long-tail dream of icing on the cake.
on One Fine Day by ARTIE
30 Jan 2015, 1:26 PM
good luck!
on Why we're here by ARTIE
30 Jan 2015, 1:25 PM
Consciousness exists to destroy itself—from pain to pleasure, to make the pain go away—and retreat back to the nothingness from whence it came.