on Untitled by Piano
11 Oct 2003, 3:09 PM
Each stanza needs to have more of a flow to the next.
on Battered moon by revy13
11 Oct 2003, 3:06 PM
Like the main idea of this poem. Some of the lines do not flow well enough with the rest.
on standing on the dry weeds by silvertongueddevil
11 Oct 2003, 10:41 AM
Like the fact that there is no capitalization. However, I think that if you are not going to have any of that then you should also leave out punctuation. Just my opinion though.
on Snow Storm by tsolantzr
11 Oct 2003, 10:40 AM
The last line does not fit the rest of the poem very well. A little work on it and this poem would be fairly good.
replying on Die by Artemis745
11 Oct 2003, 10:32 AM
My poetry is my poetry. I only write when I have a really strong emotion that I am having problems dealing with, many times it will give me depressing poems. I refuse to change my poems just because of the fact that they are all along the same emotion.
replying on My Angel's Suicide by Artemis745
11 Oct 2003, 10:29 AM
I agree. However, this is a poem and it isn't really true to life. It's fantasy. That is what makes it enjoyable.