replying on A Circle Starts with C by rusty
7 Aug 2003, 3:02 PM
glad you think it's ok, but the point is that it leads nowhere. The action is useless, there are no true emotions.
replying on The Smell of Wolves by rusty
7 Aug 2003, 2:40 PM
prawnes yes, cause I'm sure it wasn't poets
replying on A Circle Starts with C by rusty
6 Aug 2003, 2:12 PM
two questions, first in line four is it the use of "cleave" that is confusing? and I agree with your comment about "they both giggle" but as I sit her and look at the poem I realize that I'm trying to get to the action of throwing the phone at the mattress. The anger for that action comes from the remark or sound from the two. Do you have any thoughts on how else I could get to that action? because of course I need to bring in the phone so the call can be made.
replying on A Circle Starts with C by rusty
6 Aug 2003, 7:44 AM
thank you very much. I think people aren't seeing what I'm trying to do. I feel that to talk about something you must first understand it. How can you talk of rape (not that any of these poems do) in a peaceful way. Life is more then a shell. I just hope that my humble words can express emotions larger then myself.
on Killing Ben Afleck by Shardik
5 Aug 2003, 2:33 PM
I needed to smile today
on Karma by http://mulberryfairy
5 Aug 2003, 2:25 PM
I love "frenzied victim" I had to read this poem a few time out loud because tounge hit teeth so nicely.
on Ode to a Fox Cub by http://mulberryfairy
5 Aug 2003, 2:19 PM
what I enjoyed most was the vision of humanity and nature the questions and statements that were given. I very beautiful peice
on Grampa Morris by http://bandgeek
2 Aug 2003, 10:52 PM
very powerful: the images the emotions. When reading poetry it is always hard to not think of the writer as protagonist. I must say I enjoyed this especially the end there is a childlike essence that is so desperate in us all.
on Mi Casa es Su Casa by <~>
2 Aug 2003, 10:40 PM
I wanted to change my comment given the state I was in last time.
I like the use of romance and then the line "I take whatever comes to me" it's a wonderful vision that everything is prey and a meal. I would almost like to see more of that through out the poem. My question is what formula, there physical strength or the ability to make a thread? I must say the last line draws me in very much and I left feeling whole.
I like the use of romance and then the line "I take whatever comes to me" it's a wonderful vision that everything is prey and a meal. I would almost like to see more of that through out the poem. My question is what formula, there physical strength or the ability to make a thread? I must say the last line draws me in very much and I left feeling whole.
on Mi Casa es Su Casa by <~>
31 Jul 2003, 11:29 AM
Since I now what your writing of I feel I have an unfair advantage. There needs to be more length (not in reference to the poem but to protagonist) The use of force, the speed of the kill. The power and presure of this wonderful creator. I really enjoy the ice cream shop and the piles of husks, though I'm a little confused by "the inchor inside me..." I'll have to show you my pictures.