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on My days work by lucky_cmc 29 Jul 2002, 6:59 PM
It'd be nice to see some colourful and descriptive language. It's too straightforward and mundane.
Not a traditional haiku, but what the heck, eh?
You might have at least quoted phrases that I actually INCLUDED in the poem. This was written for Blake (in his style) in celebration of his surgery, which allowed him to be able to finally walk for the first time in his life. But have a nice day, regardless of your opinion of my work.