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13 Oct 2003, 5:24 PM
Poor critter. I almost get the pity you feel here. I certainly see the lack of acceptance of personal responsibility. Basically boring angst.
on some deleted poem
13 Oct 2003, 5:29 PM
Droll. Very droll. Sorry, meant drool.
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13 Oct 2003, 5:34 PM
Unkind to whom? You or the consumed? The two lines in the middle are an interesting mechanism of transition.
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13 Oct 2003, 5:36 PM
A pleasant waking. Last line excellent pun.
on some deleted poem
13 Oct 2003, 5:40 PM
I may not understand this one, but it certainly does something well.
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13 Oct 2003, 5:45 PM
Sort of 'Why is the Sky Blue?' If you are doing this as a slam on mindless morons, it works.
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13 Oct 2003, 5:48 PM
I really like this. I can't why, not because I do not want to, but because I don't know.
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14 Oct 2003, 2:11 AM
Great humor! I like your imponderables. Ya dun gud.
(This ain't a suck up [blow down]. Has nothing to do with you marvelous work here) <Saw you message on my site. Thanks for the visit.>
(This ain't a suck up [blow down]. Has nothing to do with you marvelous work here) <Saw you message on my site. Thanks for the visit.>
on some deleted poem
14 Oct 2003, 2:14 AM
This has got a lot. Angst, despair and hope said well.
on some deleted poem
14 Oct 2003, 2:17 AM
You make me laugh! To me this is a very good thing. Your view is refreshing.
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14 Oct 2003, 2:20 AM
Still fresh from your other post. (Hugs and Kisses That)
This one Whap Slap Hiss!
This one Whap Slap Hiss!
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14 Oct 2003, 2:23 AM
Taken as a trio, this and the last two posts are wonderful. Doves a Loving. I like your style.
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14 Oct 2003, 2:28 AM
And then the Remorse! Such a Soap Opera Living is. Not a slam [this]. You just do it good.
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14 Oct 2003, 2:39 AM
I can't quite wrap around this one. Perhaps it is just such an repulsing thought. Riddled with disease and no longer graceful.
on some deleted poem
14 Oct 2003, 2:45 AM
Good angst. Good boredom.
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14 Oct 2003, 10:24 AM
I see two very unhappy people commiserating each other, one of which only finds peace where there is space and distance around them... using duty as an excuse to get this. (I realize that what I see is probably not what you are saying. I know there are withins within withins and there are some who like to rub my nose in my lack of understanding... not saying that you are one of these... just that they do exist. This makes me a bit shy of exposing my ignorance.) Regardless of my understanding of this poem, I think it is very good. I look at 'material art' in the same way. I do not have to consciously understand brush-strokes and well bent lines to enjoy something. I appologise for my crude answer.
on some deleted poem
15 Oct 2003, 8:11 AM
Talk about a interesting nightmare. Great job.
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15 Oct 2003, 8:29 AM
Excellent as (I think) always.
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15 Oct 2003, 8:40 AM
If you are going to post and know the rules, the chastisement and demand that someone not vote how they feel is in very bad taste. You may as well say, "Don't look at me unless you give me a ten." If the admonishment in the beginning is part of the poem, such as "I am now dead. Judge me, but do not send me to the lowest level of Hell!â I think it is good writing...otherwise not. Considering a personâs feelings is important, usually only to the person considered. A work is put here to be critted. As this is presented as a Eulogy and you are demanding special treatment for sympathy, I give you a cold-hearted 10.
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15 Oct 2003, 10:07 AM
Like the last of an ACID drop. Fairy dust lost it's glimmer.