on some deleted poem
18 Oct 2002, 10:02 AM
You crack me up.
on The Devil Made Her Do It by Limness
17 Oct 2002, 9:00 AM
It's good but I can see why you want to fix it up a bit. I'll print this and stare at it a while. There's nothing obvious.
on some deleted poem
18 Oct 2002, 6:59 PM
This poem is bloated. No wonder you mention previously that you and your friends are gouty. I love the last stanza.
on purple and black gangstaz theme tune by rosiebailey
18 Oct 2002, 9:07 AM
I love " fastest rapper..." This poem reminds of Langston Hughes. I haven't read him in a while, i should do that. Very good.
on Ode to Larkbeat Twoshoes by Nicholas Jones
18 Oct 2002, 9:23 AM
I must be in a good mood, everything looks brilliant today. My only peeve is the use of 'time' twice and the end of a line.
on When Your Best Friend Says You Drink Too Much by jessicazee
18 Oct 2002, 10:12 AM
Your previous 2 were so good, my expectations are not met with this one, but I can see it in there, like a red speck in an egg. The last stanza is my favorite. Trying starting with that one and see were it leads, Sugar Dumpling.
on the girl what gave scott the look by UAFANTHORPEY
18 Oct 2002, 8:47 AM
Some of this is brilliant. Soemof this makes me squirm. I'll have to get use to it and come back to it later.
on some deleted poem
16 Oct 2002, 7:38 PM
Well done, 13 words on love and violence. An effective economy.
on some deleted poem
16 Oct 2002, 2:27 PM
Ample imagery, my favorite. The wings and the petals make me smile. Should it be "will coil.."?
on some deleted poem
16 Oct 2002, 2:29 PM
I love this title. I run and have fallen on 3 occasions. Worse than a car wreck. King-Kong or Indiana Jones?
on Ponder on Pagan. by <{Baba^Yaga}>
16 Oct 2002, 5:15 PM
Epic! Spectacular! Technicolor madness. Don't let Schpeilberg get his hands on it. He'll turn it into heart-warmer, the dirty little heeb!
on some deleted poem
16 Oct 2002, 5:21 PM
Absofuckinlutely. The Santa Monica / Puente Hills corridor. From the Pacific to the Cleveland National Forest. It runs through my hometown, About a 5 min. drive to the base of it. 3.5 miles up, 3.5 miles down. Lots of mountain bikers. Chaparal, deer, hawks, & vultures. In the Fall & Spring you can hear the coyote pups howling at sunset, when mama & papa return with the KFC. The first time I went upin the hills I was 9 and running away from home. I saw a rattle snake, ran down the hill and returned home to find noone had missed me. what a disappointment.
on On the Swings by Christof
17 Oct 2002, 8:43 AM
Playful.