poemranker ::20 most recent comments by god'swife (861-880)

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on some deleted poem 18 Oct 2002, 10:02 AM
You crack me up.
on The Devil Made Her Do It by Limness 17 Oct 2002, 9:00 AM
It's good but I can see why you want to fix it up a bit. I'll print this and stare at it a while. There's nothing obvious.
on some deleted poem 18 Oct 2002, 6:59 PM
This poem is bloated. No wonder you mention previously that you and your friends are gouty. I love the last stanza.
I love " fastest rapper..." This poem reminds of Langston Hughes. I haven't read him in a while, i should do that. Very good.
on Ode to Larkbeat Twoshoes by Nicholas Jones 18 Oct 2002, 9:23 AM
I must be in a good mood, everything looks brilliant today. My only peeve is the use of 'time' twice and the end of a line.
Your previous 2 were so good, my expectations are not met with this one, but I can see it in there, like a red speck in an egg. The last stanza is my favorite. Trying starting with that one and see were it leads, Sugar Dumpling.
on sex by Limness 18 Oct 2002, 1:30 PM
Ain't it the truth. Young and dumb.
on Loosed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 8:42 AM
"...bare these sinews" is the only thing that hangs me up here. S3 is gorgeous. Stop running in incestual circles. See some other band. I went to Bob Dylan last night and 2 brothers tried to pick up on me.
on the girl what gave scott the look by UAFANTHORPEY 18 Oct 2002, 8:47 AM
Some of this is brilliant. Soemof this makes me squirm. I'll have to get use to it and come back to it later.
on some deleted poem 16 Oct 2002, 7:38 PM
Well done, 13 words on love and violence. An effective economy.
on ending by Limness 16 Oct 2002, 2:18 PM
I hate you because you're beautiful. P& K will be by later to tell you this is not a High-Coup, Hi-Coo. Hey Cool poem. You are totally bitchin'.
on some deleted poem 16 Oct 2002, 2:27 PM
Ample imagery, my favorite. The wings and the petals make me smile. Should it be "will coil.."?
on some deleted poem 16 Oct 2002, 2:29 PM
I love this title. I run and have fallen on 3 occasions. Worse than a car wreck. King-Kong or Indiana Jones?
on remnants by crin 16 Oct 2002, 2:31 PM
The sutures are unravelling that hold this thing together.
on Ponder on Pagan. by <{Baba^Yaga}> 16 Oct 2002, 5:15 PM
Epic! Spectacular! Technicolor madness. Don't let Schpeilberg get his hands on it. He'll turn it into heart-warmer, the dirty little heeb!
on some deleted poem 16 Oct 2002, 5:21 PM
Absofuckinlutely. The Santa Monica / Puente Hills corridor. From the Pacific to the Cleveland National Forest. It runs through my hometown, About a 5 min. drive to the base of it. 3.5 miles up, 3.5 miles down. Lots of mountain bikers. Chaparal, deer, hawks, & vultures. In the Fall & Spring you can hear the coyote pups howling at sunset, when mama & papa return with the KFC. The first time I went upin the hills I was 9 and running away from home. I saw a rattle snake, ran down the hill and returned home to find noone had missed me. what a disappointment.
on On the Swings by Christof 17 Oct 2002, 8:43 AM
Playful.
on Loosed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 8:57 AM
What did you change?
on Hunt by cobalt 18 Oct 2002, 1:34 PM
Well done. I don't get 'uncradled'. The rest is perfect. On second thought 'heavenward' seems like it might easily be replaced by something with more impact.
on flight by soccer23 16 Oct 2002, 8:00 PM
Sweet Jesus, this is bizarre and bad.