Nonsense.

Ambiguous Love Poem for a Girl I Never Knew.

Typo S5, L2.

I dare you to "walk across a rainbow" . One more example of the most overly written about theme for a poem. Not the worst I've seen, but just as uninteresting and shallow. I thought we weren't suppose to go into the light?

Amalea, it's bad manners to leave requests on other peoples submission and not comment on the poem. you done it twice to me, please avoid doing it again, thank you. Nature cannot seep from the atmosphere. Hydrosphere is a completely unpoetic image.

Start by living in the space between past and future. Sorry to disappoint but there are countless people out there who could make you happy. It's just a matter of wanting to sustain the illusion. You're poem is bogged down with repetitive language and a lack of creativity.

Personally, I've never liked inversions. I'd much rather sacrifice the rhyme. I'm a big sports fan. Baseball, followed closely by what is known here as soccer. It a bitch not to score. the inversion kills this for me. I want you to tell me more about the play.

Your poems are not grand but they are effective. "My self a little happiness..." is very dear to my heart. A sweet and humble philosophy. By the way, youe website is beautiful my son and I browsed through a little last night, he will definitely be benefiting from it. It's very pretty. I will make a point to use the search engine there.

Hey razorgrin! Posting soon? Hadn't read this, actually come to think of it I may have overlooked your poems. Love the word pickman. The 2nd couplet is my favorite, even though "moon-trees brew" seemed awkward, or maybe because.

Ilike this. Except for "live and die..." how does one live and die by fraility. I'm not getting it. The last couplet is strong, sensual and sad. For your mere 19, not bad at all. 19, good god.

Well these are pretty bad. Maybe drunk is not your color. There not as bad as the moronic comments left by Jigg. You're not really saying anything are you?

Jiminy Christmas. Are you sure we weren't lovers once? This sounds too much like something a lover of mine would have written. They are mostly brutal and brilliant.

Sweet child. You are alone because you choose it, or because you need chemicals to help you with your depression. Either way, it makes me sad to think of you languishing in solitude. Life is short to the extreme.

I've read this through 4x's now. I can't remember the last time I enjoyed a battle poem. probably Tennyson's King Arthur or something like that. Hard to believe someone contempary is writing this, this well. Again the theme of Chivalry mixed with brutality, as in Hangman. I find this notion sexy and ancestral. How do men like you deal with this suit and tie society?

Just keeps getting better. There's a place called heaven and a place called hell. There is a place as cold and disturbing as nightmares at the bottom of a lake.

Blughh! This is an all around failure. Cliche and badly written. I don't usually comment on bad poetry written by well intentioned youth, but this is so alarmingly bad I could not keep quiet.

Wite a poem about teaching Joanna how to take care of herself. That might be interesting and not so stereotypically condescending.

I could read this forever.

I get the feeling I know you from somewhere. it's the way you speak, so familiar and pleasing. there's some pretention in this poem but I don't believe it's intentional. Odd how this is sort of a companion to my Untitled III. He kept my heart in a velvet lined box. Interesting. "The oh, don't worry" line feels abrupt, and unnecessary considering you'll never tell her about them. How would she worry?

Write me one of these.