on some deleted poem
4 Sep 2002, 11:03 PM
Catamitis, you've made a mistake in the last line. It's 'I'll...' (your welcome). Also it's not biege darling, I told you, It's Navajo White. i love you but objectivity dictates a 5.
on i would have you by silvertongueddevil
5 Sep 2002, 9:43 AM
This is gorgeous. This devil has his charms.
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 9:52 AM
The only seasons we have here are in window displays, actually they are here however subtle, but not enough for the birds to notice. Mr Gray's an idiot. Chat directions: Click on chat then write something. To log off click the X.
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 10:01 AM
Christof- care to join me in the chat room (God that sounds illicit) I want to talk to you about a Mr. Ted Hughes.
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 10:11 AM
Oh well my times run out. Back to the real world. Ciao Bellas.
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 10:13 AM
Oh ok then quickly can you recommend a book. I realize he's the widow of Plath and other's found out last night he was poet laureate in England. Read something called lineage.
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 9:04 AM
No, I am a true lover of men. Always have been. They are the agents of my fascination.
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 9:08 AM
yes it does rock, so I'll try it own. What do you say P&K? How does it look?
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 9:12 AM
Thank you for the compliment Christof. I don't think society cultivates that aspect in women. It's that double standard shooting you boys in the foot. I just happened to of had little will power. I indulged, and so I grew to love them.
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 9:36 AM
I like the implication of the protagonists migrating when things don't go their way, but do crows migrate? They certainly don't here. As far as running the show, are you talking about reproduction?
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 10:20 AM
Well i really must go, I hate being late to anything. Please leave any suggestions of books in this section I'll come back to it. Also you KnowingPoet, please anyone you can reccomend. I should've followed my heart and studied Lit., but practicality won out. Thank you gentlemen, enjoy your day.
on some deleted poem
4 Sep 2002, 11:16 PM
Mixed metaphors. I'm in the ring fighting for compassion and the next thing I know it's threating to rain and I'm tied to a horse. 'some get it, some don't you will or you won't.' Is sophmoric, unneccesary and detracts from the sermon.
on Lines by OneFingerAnswer
4 Sep 2002, 11:26 PM
Took me a couple of readings to understand. If you make the line break at more, the pause would help comunicate the thought.
on Birthday Love by Tormentedsoul718
4 Sep 2002, 11:42 PM
Tormentedsoul718, I'd ream you a hole but there's no need for debate. It's plain to see you're an inadequate fake. Go forever pretending that this isn't you, but please straighten your costume, your mask's all askew.
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 12:18 AM
Zeezee, Feathers sounds to fluffy for these poultry, but please keep trying. Thank you.
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 8:51 AM
Is that a royal We? I think you're nice.
on some deleted poem
5 Sep 2002, 8:55 AM
Men are definitely nice, very nice. "We are all wrong" sounds good, but wouldn't I be giving too much away right at the start?
on some deleted poem
4 Sep 2002, 10:49 PM
My dear Catamitus,(that's my new pet name for you -=Dark_Angel=-)nothing pleases this old girl more then our delicious tete a tetes. You misunderstand,my darling imbecile, I am neither compelled nor inclined to defend justice. I simply love a good confrontation now and again. It's good for my complexion. As for my sense of satisfaction, now that I have you to rankle,life is bliss. slice slice...chop chop... kiss kiss.
on remembering you by sapphire_rain7
5 Sep 2002, 9:24 AM
"and the willows weep/this cold rain/doesn't wash away" Always good when a middle line pertains to both what preceeds and what proceeds. Sexy poem.