on Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles
22 Aug 2002, 1:49 PM
Fart Angel you're a dick and a pussy.
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2002, 5:19 PM
I've got many up my beautiful sleeves that show how much I worship you gorgeous devils. Just wait my darling.
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2002, 6:12 PM
I know what a 13+ reading average is. I have a scool age child. Glad to see your getting an education. I will make it a point to look up the books you suggested though I usually don't like vampire books. I'm hoping it can give me some insight on young womqn these days. Also, most importantly read Anne Sexton's Transformations ASAP. I discovered her at age 13 and she's been the very best conifidante.
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2002, 3:09 PM
it's best to elude about the river, not come straight out and give us it's name, and the then will be rid of you makes 0 sense. 01/10
on Summer Son by Frass
22 Aug 2002, 5:41 PM
Cheers! Heres to you and your family, may you be blessed with many years of joy and health.That son of your's will teach you more about poetry then any of us could. Work on this, it's almost there. Just tighten the bolts alittle. Isn't it amazing to be a father! I bet you race home just to look at him.
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2002, 5:51 PM
my child, go read a book. go read many books. Pack a bag and go on along trip to Europe or hitch a ride on a freight train or spend more time masturbating. Stay away from the computer and the boys. They will teach you nothing about yourself. books are your best friends. Read Richard Braughtigan's So the wind won't blow it away and Henry Miller's Black Spring, arm yourself. There is no smell that attracts voracious males like a sweet dumb girl
on Questions to the Unknown by Mephisto
22 Aug 2002, 5:58 PM
Keep trying, your soul is headed down the path of happiness. Read some Buddha parables if you haven't already. I bet your a fine young man. But I still have to give your poem a 3/10. I've got grown up appetites
on Gilded Stumps of Olde (AN STORY THAT IS NOT AN POEME) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
22 Aug 2002, 2:34 PM
Best story I've read in a long time. Great composition. It's complicated but there's no meandering. I think this would make a great kid's book. I know my 11 year old would piss his pants laughing and squealing with joy. I respect your ability to create great humor. Funny. 10/10
on Falling... by quantumenterprises
22 Aug 2002, 2:45 PM
this takes a quantum leap into to the realm of saccharinity. 'Oh life bizarre'?... Oh poem bizarre! Keep it real for the peeps. Settle down a little and speak to us as if you were telling yourself something important about yourself. Good luck
on Dark Lady by quantumenterprises
22 Aug 2002, 2:50 PM
Your hyper-poeticising is ok here because it's to an inanimate object, which makes it humouress.
on Titanic by DespondentDotCom
22 Aug 2002, 2:55 PM
It's 5 then 7 then 5.
on Titanic by DespondentDotCom
22 Aug 2002, 2:55 PM
It's 5 then 7 then 5.
on aphelion by DespondentDotCom
22 Aug 2002, 2:57 PM
Better. but not for me.
on saving myself for marriage by Venus
22 Aug 2002, 3:00 PM
improved but still needs a little more salt, or maybe some garlic. Why is your starfish broken, exactly?
on Life On Earth by dougsoderstrom
22 Aug 2002, 3:15 PM
There is no way out, you are right we're all bound towards death. But that's something a 5 year old discovers. Make this work, focus on some specific experience or moment which made you feel this, and write about the experience, not the philosophy
on saving myself for marriage by Venus
22 Aug 2002, 3:17 PM
yes my dear, but why is it broken, I mean f**king it won't break anything.
on Reflected, Dreamed by Frass
22 Aug 2002, 5:28 PM
Cheers! I don't know what thiws is about but it's well done a that's what counts. Although I can never get use to sentences being turned on their behinds for sake of a rhymn. (fromdeepisgleaned,isupwardbeamed)how about deeply gleaned and upwardly beamed.
on Window poems by kawakurdi
22 Aug 2002, 5:32 PM
edit edit edit edit i can not say it enough. most of these sentences can be pared down to 3-5 words and the poem would be much better for it.
on Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles
22 Aug 2002, 10:55 AM
oops i forgot to sum it all up. I have female sex organs. My gender is female. If I identify with males I may consider my self a male but my actual gender remaions female. Ican havr my clit surgically inlarge but I can't have my vagina sewn shut enless I have my reproductive organs removed. Which can be done but is exceedingly rare. My chromosones will remain XX so clinically my gender is still female. Gender is a clinical word. Identity is used in the socio/psycho construct.
on {Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8
22 Aug 2002, 6:06 PM
exelente, mi amigo! I'm telling you haiku is your ticket to... I mean i's more like your antidote, your Ridilan.