poemranker ::20 most recent comments by god'swife (881-900) and replies

Comments bygod'swife, 881–900 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on Loosed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 7:50 PM
Better. Juliet didn't drink her death but I don't mind. She did unsheath one happy dagger. Perhaps it should be "my weapon" singular.
on Impervious by heart 18 Oct 2002, 7:47 PM
Very sweet. You must have been in a terific mood when you wrote this.
on regret. by darby pyn 18 Oct 2002, 7:36 PM
Caught between hell and home is fucking fanstastic. this quickly turns to caios at "bored contention..."
replying on oedipus is raising a pint to me now by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 7:29 PM
I know darling.
on oedipus is raising a pint to me now by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 7:03 PM
Yea wel,l Oedipus didn't know what he was doing, you on the other hand...
replying on Hunt by cobalt 18 Oct 2002, 6:54 PM
See my previous comment, break or burst towards heaven? I want you to take me hunting. I promise I'll be very good.
replying on Hunt by cobalt 18 Oct 2002, 3:14 PM
He is in a blind.
replying on Hunt by cobalt 18 Oct 2002, 3:12 PM
Uncradled does not bring to my mind unsafe. Are the slivers of blue ducks or bullets? I think ducks. Change shoot to break or burst. what do you think?
on Hunt by cobalt 18 Oct 2002, 1:34 PM
Well done. I don't get 'uncradled'. The rest is perfect. On second thought 'heavenward' seems like it might easily be replaced by something with more impact.
on sex by Limness 18 Oct 2002, 1:30 PM
Ain't it the truth. Young and dumb.
replying on FHjk by Dark Angle 18 Oct 2002, 1:19 PM
You mustn't speak of Nigel that way. He's alive and well I can tell you. I snuck into his room last night after you fell asleep, I hope you don't mind.
replying on Loosed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 10:58 AM
Duh, I knew it sounded wrong, oh well. Ummm, he was fucking awesome. Did a few covers, most notably BrownSugar by the Rolling Stones. He was well above lucid. Sharp and to the point. Enjoy.
on When Your Best Friend Says You Drink Too Much by jessicazee 18 Oct 2002, 10:12 AM
Your previous 2 were so good, my expectations are not met with this one, but I can see it in there, like a red speck in an egg. The last stanza is my favorite. Trying starting with that one and see were it leads, Sugar Dumpling.
on Ode to Larkbeat Twoshoes by Nicholas Jones 18 Oct 2002, 9:23 AM
I must be in a good mood, everything looks brilliant today. My only peeve is the use of 'time' twice and the end of a line.
replying on Loosed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 9:12 AM
In the beginning of the play Romeo is scolded about his being love sick over another, I forget her name, R something, and then so quickly becoming love sick over Juliet. Can you use that? You'd have to put yourself in Romeo's place.
on purple and black gangstaz theme tune by rosiebailey 18 Oct 2002, 9:07 AM
I love " fastest rapper..." This poem reminds of Langston Hughes. I haven't read him in a while, i should do that. Very good.
replying on Loosed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 9:02 AM
Yuo could talk abotu his failings, or the trap he has no power to escape.
on Loosed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 8:57 AM
What did you change?
on the girl what gave scott the look by UAFANTHORPEY 18 Oct 2002, 8:47 AM
Some of this is brilliant. Soemof this makes me squirm. I'll have to get use to it and come back to it later.
on Loosed by <~> 18 Oct 2002, 8:42 AM
"...bare these sinews" is the only thing that hangs me up here. S3 is gorgeous. Stop running in incestual circles. See some other band. I went to Bob Dylan last night and 2 brothers tried to pick up on me.