on The Devil Made Her Do It by Limness
17 Oct 2002, 9:00 AM
It's good but I can see why you want to fix it up a bit. I'll print this and stare at it a while. There's nothing obvious.
on On the Swings by Christof
17 Oct 2002, 8:43 AM
Playful.
replying on Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT
17 Oct 2002, 8:14 AM
Burn that book. She's a terrible poet.
replying on On a chill morning by razorgrin
17 Oct 2002, 7:54 AM
It not's disjointed to me. Drive is perfect. The word puts her in a car, with foggy glass between her and stranger. I had no trouble with it. He's watching her roll out the drive, inexpressive look on his face, arms hanging down at his sides.
replying on The Way It Is by Tascobar
16 Oct 2002, 5:30 PM
I have capture the Spawn of Bachus. I am taking him to the Castle of Carl the Republican. I will feed him Famous Stars til he poops his Batmans. Caio for now.
on Ponder on Pagan. by <{Baba^Yaga}>
16 Oct 2002, 5:15 PM
Epic! Spectacular! Technicolor madness. Don't let Schpeilberg get his hands on it. He'll turn it into heart-warmer, the dirty little heeb!
I have read all your previous comments. You are the great offender, I mean defender, I mean trans-gender. E-mail sender. Drunken bender. Bike tire mender. Just kiddin' with ya hunny-buns. You are a tad anal when it comes to h'ay cooze. Domo aregato. Unstick the toddler.
on The obsessive compulsive sloth was a junkie by <{Baba^Yaga}>
16 Oct 2002, 2:13 PM
7,000 dollars! 7,000 dollars! ( Hot Tamales are aero-dynamic) I'm glad I went to bed early that night.
replying on On a chill morning by razorgrin
16 Oct 2002, 2:03 PM
Gaping hole? Please point it out least i fall in. Looks fine to me. She could be driving anything; bike, scooter, a broom. What's the problem?
on Confessor's Nightcap by Limness
16 Oct 2002, 1:12 PM
You are very sexy.
on On a chill morning by razorgrin
16 Oct 2002, 11:32 AM
Excellent, excellent.
on Homemade Greetings by jessicazee
16 Oct 2002, 8:43 AM
Fanfuckintastic. I am clicking print.
on going to lie with the devil by crin
16 Oct 2002, 8:20 AM
"but I always betray myself....." is novel and good, leaving fingerprints is also a good image. The rest is boring. A conversation heard at the back of the bus.
on like love in the movies by crin
16 Oct 2002, 8:16 AM
The title is fantastic. I think I'll steal it. the poem itself I'm disappointed to say is cliche and predictable.