poemranker ::20 most recent comments by zodiac (341-360) and replies

Comments byzodiac, 341–360 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on angst of the saints by calliope 17 Jan 2006, 10:39 AM
A publisher's eye is defined by what sells. That is, what people buy, what they like. Don't make it publishers' fault.
replying on My Reason by PoeticXTC 17 Jan 2006, 10:36 AM
An emotional piece of writing: "For sale: Baby shoes, never used." - Hemmingway

Creating or representing emotion in writing usually has very little to do with yelling and emphasis. Drop the caps. Add some emotion.
on A Haiku by amanda_dcosta 17 Jan 2006, 10:33 AM
1Tell 2me 3more, 4tell 5me 6more
1A 2hai 3ku's 4some 5thing 6I 7don't 8know.
1A 2-5 3-7 4-5 5or 6so?

Nice. A good commentary on the limitations of haiku-length.
on Sky All Around Me (goddess edit) by ecargo 17 Jan 2006, 10:28 AM
On a Friends rerun I saw last night, there's a morbid zoo custodian who addresses an opossum as "enigma of the trees, upside-down denizen of the night." This reminded me of that a little.
on Do 20 always make this poem sense? by Prince of Void 17 Jan 2006, 10:20 AM
This poem does not make sense.
on They Knew Me From Adam by D. $ Fontera 17 Jan 2006, 10:17 AM
Lose some of the throwaway phrases and commentary - "But, of course, it is harder than you can imagine," "over, yet again," the last bit. Otherwise, nice.
on Reap by ecargo 17 Jan 2006, 10:14 AM
This is really great, biteme. My only suggestion: wreathe should be wreath.
on A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta 17 Jan 2006, 10:13 AM
Good work, Amanda. I especially like the first and seventh verses (though "did be" should just be "were"). Nice.
replying on Do 20 always make this poem sense? by Prince of Void 15 Jan 2006, 11:53 PM
Can you tell us what a line like "Do 20 always make this poem sense" means?
on Racism 3 by Dovina 15 Jan 2006, 4:10 PM
They did, didn't they? Add a stanza: How is what she thought TRUE?
replying on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac 15 Jan 2006, 12:49 AM
Good call. Neither is yours.
on Racism 2 by Dovina 14 Jan 2006, 10:50 AM
In short, if you want to improve your poetry, consider selling your house in Orange County, quitting your job, and moving somewhere with real ethnic balance, like Charlotte.
on Racism 2 by Dovina 14 Jan 2006, 10:47 AM
I cannot fucking believe you're still doing this. Please, for once take the hint: YOU DON'T KNOW ABOUT MINORITIES. YOU DON'T ACTUALLY KNOW ANY BLACK PEOPLE. EVERYTHING YOU WRITE ABOUT THEM COMES OFF SOUNDING INSANE.
replying on The Prayer Vendor by Enkidu 12 Jan 2006, 6:22 PM
That or because he's offering them up for sacrifices, for persecution.
replying on The Prayer Vendor by Enkidu 12 Jan 2006, 6:20 PM
I think he means like, "That dress becomes you."
replying on cat by Dental Panic 12 Jan 2006, 5:51 PM
I'm not trying to start an argument, just commenting on how I could stand to learn gentleness.
replying on cat by Dental Panic 12 Jan 2006, 5:50 PM
You know -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I. knows Hawking.
replying on Flow by zodiac 12 Jan 2006, 4:18 PM
That's a nice theory, and I'd love to claim it. But my line-ends are almost always for bad rhyme or bad rhythm (ie, -room/come, good/hard/flood, be/-ory). What words I decide to rhyme or make fall at that point in the rhythm does have something to do with what you're talking about. And richa, too. I've never put it in so many words, but I feel it.
replying on Tulip by richa 12 Jan 2006, 1:52 PM
I had to read it twice, but I got it. I don't know about punctuation. A comma after line1 might please everyone.
on The copper man and Labrador by Caducus 11 Jan 2006, 9:35 PM
The latest victim of the multiple self-voting bug. So sad, Caducus. So sad.