replying on Ann & Dan & I by Goad
8 Feb 2005, 5:17 PM
And have you read this one recently? http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
Am I just deluded, or is F.o.G. a serious genius?
Am I just deluded, or is F.o.G. a serious genius?
replying on Camera Obscura by Fear of Garbage
8 Feb 2005, 5:14 PM
SupremeDreamer, read this poem again. Do you still think it's an eight? Really? This is one of my favourite poems. Not like "one of my favourite poems from pomeranker", but like one of my Favourite Poems. It's sitting there in my mind, for the last year since I read it, with poems from Bukowski, Cummings, Rilke, etc.
Bukowski would have liked this poem.
Bukowski would have liked this poem.
on Camera Obscura by Fear of Garbage
8 Feb 2005, 5:00 PM
Christ, this is a good fucking poem.
I read it a year ago, and it was still in my head...so I came looking for it. And it's still gold.
I read it a year ago, and it was still in my head...so I came looking for it. And it's still gold.
replying on Separation by Dovina
8 Feb 2005, 4:42 PM
if you come from an evangelical or fundamentalist background, the whole thing rings quite true. That hot-cold thing is an oft-quoted passage. And the whole bunch of them, they're just a pack of pharisees accusing everyone else of being sinners, absurd since Christ hung out with sinners and shat on the pharisees.
Hey Dovina -- I grew up in the UPC. Yep, me. One grandfather, six uncles, a brother, and a brother-in-law were/are preachers. Church 3 times a week 'till I was 18. Memorized ENTIRE Romans & most of Acts when I was 15/16, went all the way to the finals on a bible quiz team.
Would you have guessed it? lol
Hey Dovina -- I grew up in the UPC. Yep, me. One grandfather, six uncles, a brother, and a brother-in-law were/are preachers. Church 3 times a week 'till I was 18. Memorized ENTIRE Romans & most of Acts when I was 15/16, went all the way to the finals on a bible quiz team.
Would you have guessed it? lol
replying on Family Portrait by woodstock20000
8 Feb 2005, 4:17 PM
I'm sorry; don't mean to harass
But I fear, to be truthful, alas
This pome's for the birds
And to scratch the last words
Heck - you might as well just scratch your ass.
But I fear, to be truthful, alas
This pome's for the birds
And to scratch the last words
Heck - you might as well just scratch your ass.
on Reverse Pschology by Mister Cakes
8 Feb 2005, 4:04 PM
Here's a pome that's naught more than an anagram
Of a word with a y that's gone on the lam
I assume you've some meaning
In there for the gleaning
But if none can construe it, who gives a damne?
Of a word with a y that's gone on the lam
I assume you've some meaning
In there for the gleaning
But if none can construe it, who gives a damne?
on The Disease Of The Dancing Cats by Mister Cakes
8 Feb 2005, 3:50 PM
There's apparently cats who will dance
When at dark they at last have the chance
Blah blah blah yadda yadda
For us to care, dude, you've gotta
The conceit with some PO'TRY enhance.
When at dark they at last have the chance
Blah blah blah yadda yadda
For us to care, dude, you've gotta
The conceit with some PO'TRY enhance.
on Paris 1941-63 by Mister Cakes
8 Feb 2005, 3:39 PM
He spent 22 years in a sock?
Champs-Elysées with some French dude named Jacques?
Unless "sock" is a metaphor,
For the crucial part of a whore --
In which case Mister Cakes is a cock.
Champs-Elysées with some French dude named Jacques?
Unless "sock" is a metaphor,
For the crucial part of a whore --
In which case Mister Cakes is a cock.
replying on Ann & Dan & I by Goad
8 Feb 2005, 3:19 PM
Mr. Cakes didn't get what he thought,
(and it seems doesn't like what I've wrought)
Since he voted a three
Which insult left me
Disconcerted, distressed and distraught.
Not.
(and it seems doesn't like what I've wrought)
Since he voted a three
Which insult left me
Disconcerted, distressed and distraught.
Not.
replying on Ann & Dan & I by Goad
8 Feb 2005, 3:09 PM
no I hadn't! Thanks, that was great.
I see that you saw this: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
It made me cry.
I see that you saw this: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.j
It made me cry.
on just can't by shygirl1619
6 Feb 2005, 5:10 PM
A shy girl who was recently dumped
On PR with her poetry jumped.
We'll do nothing but damn her
For spelling and grammar
And rhyme have -- like love -- got her stumped.
On PR with her poetry jumped.
We'll do nothing but damn her
For spelling and grammar
And rhyme have -- like love -- got her stumped.
replying on Harry & the Little Bird by Goad
6 Feb 2005, 8:33 AM
I've an eight for my perfidy, how grand
Though the rest of the poetry's judged bland
perhaps it'd less bore you
the Schnectadian to explore you --
can you more than the chickadee withstand?
Though the rest of the poetry's judged bland
perhaps it'd less bore you
the Schnectadian to explore you --
can you more than the chickadee withstand?
replying on Harry & the Little Bird by Goad
6 Feb 2005, 8:11 AM
What a poet will do to stick to a form!
With words play what tricks to the mold to conform!
But it jusn't isn't fair - no!
To harm a poor little helpless baby sparrow,
One man's tale as a pome to perform.
With words play what tricks to the mold to conform!
But it jusn't isn't fair - no!
To harm a poor little helpless baby sparrow,
One man's tale as a pome to perform.
on You took my half dozen by poodietat
6 Feb 2005, 4:53 AM
far more interesting than the posts it is in reaction to. Great fun as an in-joke on societate de wanker. But it also stands alone, with that Bukowskian last line.
well, it has many allusions for me. Were you aware of the double meaning of your own pome? because an arabesque in ballet often accompanies a long beat, and the transition to/from another form involves arching/flattening the arch of the foot, accompanied by a grace note. So every main word in the pome has a double meaning -- two parallel images, complementing each other. Sent chills down my spine. Painful points -- also fits both the dance metaphor and the meaning of arabesque arch as an arch decorated with an angular motif of stylized leaves & vines.
on A love apple's just a tomato (edit of "Uprooting") by fevriere
3 Feb 2005, 2:28 PM
I liked the apples line very much. It's like one of those delightful, bursting with child-like joy unexepected lines eec was so good at surprising you with.
on Dying Abroad by zodiac
3 Feb 2005, 2:22 PM
Loved it. Beautiful and wistful. God I'm a sucker for wistful. I think you're channeling "Anonymous" again in this piece, lol, it's got that timeless feel (You know, Anonymous the "small rain" guy)
kill "slip sibilant." It's clever & reflexive -- which is completely out of place in the mood of the piece.
Perhaps I agree the last fractious line oughtn't be so altered. I'm not sure. Suppose you could say something like "with the feeling your home, girl,...". But you've certainly earned the right to mess with forms however you like...
kill "slip sibilant." It's clever & reflexive -- which is completely out of place in the mood of the piece.
Perhaps I agree the last fractious line oughtn't be so altered. I'm not sure. Suppose you could say something like "with the feeling your home, girl,...". But you've certainly earned the right to mess with forms however you like...
she has two, three lines like that in every fucking poem. Some two unexpectedly combined words that just stun me, bursting in the brain with fractals of association and meaning.