on some deleted poem
18 Apr 2004, 7:06 PM
nice... very nice. good one. this really speaks to me right now. thanks.
on some deleted poem
18 Apr 2004, 9:07 PM
if everyone is suggesting (and i'm new here totally loving this)... but i'd suggest "masquerades" or "will attire" although attires could be choppy. or maybe "ensembeles".
i don't know. it does stick there but i get the point. depending on your delivery and all... could be just perfect the way it is.
my two sense.
i don't know. it does stick there but i get the point. depending on your delivery and all... could be just perfect the way it is.
my two sense.
on The Flame by Fire_is_cool
18 Apr 2004, 9:10 PM
sorry - didn't like it. need to elaborate or something i think. diggin the concept but it didn't pack enough punch (in my very humble opinion).
just being real. hope not to offend you know...
just being real. hope not to offend you know...
on some deleted poem
19 Apr 2004, 9:38 AM
i like it. i'd like to suggestive you use a descriptive for the dream because i think it would make that stanza more interesting, but other than that... i think it's very good.
really liking the second stanza a lot.
:) my two cents...
really liking the second stanza a lot.
:) my two cents...
on Radiation Reflections by sarah
23 Apr 2004, 9:22 AM
really? this seems funny to you guys? i am seriously surprised.
this is TRUE... my mom is terminally ill from having undergone radiation for cancer 20 years ago.
huh. i'm disappointed. but ok. whatever.
this is TRUE... my mom is terminally ill from having undergone radiation for cancer 20 years ago.
huh. i'm disappointed. but ok. whatever.
on Radiation Reflections by sarah
23 Apr 2004, 9:43 AM
(hanging head in shame)... YES! I'm serious. But you know, I guess humor comes out most when people are inadvertently funny and are being serious.
Perhaps you're right though.
ARGH!
Thanks for commenting. I feel silly now. :)
Perhaps you're right though.
ARGH!
Thanks for commenting. I feel silly now. :)
on some deleted poem
23 Apr 2004, 7:42 PM
i believe i recognize this from live journal... (in case you'd remember me i was decidedly_duffy and was doing the 100 poems thing on lj the same time as you)...
so anyway. i love this one. esp. the last bit. makes me smile. and am happy to see you again!
sarah
so anyway. i love this one. esp. the last bit. makes me smile. and am happy to see you again!
sarah
on The Brigadier's Motto by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
23 Apr 2004, 11:01 PM
very interesting... i like it
on do you talk out loud in public? by peaceseeker
16 Jun 2004, 10:31 AM
Got better - hooked me more toward the end. My 2 cents. Good first couple of lines though, so got me interested. :) Some reworking and this could be killer. I dig the message. Nice work!
on some deleted poem
16 Jun 2004, 10:33 AM
made me giggle. :)