Yeah, it's clearly missing the WIIFM factor.

The condemnation is coming from the good news/bad news doctor. Why? Because the central character is clearly at fault for the bad news - that his bones are like rubber. Whose bones? Why, the water dragon's bones, of course.

Geez, it's becoming cryptic even to me now!

Thanks for the suggestions! Any advice on my latest submission...???

I hear you. But it's no riddle. An "afflicted" woman is hearing some news. She doesn't hear the whole message because her mind is busy trying to justify her potential guilt. Too shrouded perhaps?

I like to get a little feedback before explaining context, just to see if anyone can piece it together as-is. But feeling it is good too, yes?

Thanks!

Thanks for the advice and rating!

Thanks. Which 2 commas?

Thanks, I will.

Thanks. I hear you on the shorter refrain. I'll play around with it a bit more.

Thanks for the advice. I'm not really a lyrical sort, but I'll play with the form and repost.

Thanks. How do you think I could better set up the past and present?

Indeed, you are truly blessed. No oats. Breadcrumbs, and not the prepackaged sort. The preparation of food you are unwilling to eat is an intuitive process, as well. One must intuit what might make it exemplary, while remaining true to the classical version. Uh, what were we talking about again?

Have I already become so predictable?

I also hate meatloaf, won't touch it. That's the point. However, I am a fan of buffalo meat.