on some deleted poem
1 May 2004, 2:58 PM
Broken down in simplicity: Excellent!
on A Flower for Monet by Shuushin
1 May 2004, 3:01 PM
Beautiful wordplay... well thought out... beautiful overall.
on some deleted poem
3 Jun 2004, 4:06 PM
I've changed my profile, so can we please get back to critiquing the poem, not the wannabe poet?
on Hailing Miriam by Ranger
25 Feb 2006, 1:53 PM
I happen to enjoy this poem as is. Great flowing rhythm, excellent imagery. I do, however, agree with the others who have stated that replacing Lorelei with someone readers can relate to either Mary or the location of the poem. Excellent work though.
on Gaia and Man by Blue Magpie
24 Feb 2006, 1:42 PM
I enjoyed this. It's a bit long, but for some reason, it seems to fit in it's current form. I like the creativity used with the end rhymes, but, I feel that it has limited the scope of the poem in some ways as well. All in all though... this is excellent.
on some deleted poem
24 Feb 2006, 1:49 PM
I find this to be horrendous... I give you a 2 because it took mad bawls to come one here and post something like this. So you geta 2 - for sheer courage.
on Pillosophy by Bobjim
25 Feb 2006, 1:20 AM
A bit obscure don't you think? It might help if you elaborate a bit on what you mean. Also... can't a person support oneself with both pills and philosophy?
on Ode to necrophilia by Bobjim
25 Feb 2006, 1:24 AM
Are you trying to make the worst poem I've read? If so, you've succeeded. Besides the fact that the poem is sickening in its message, its design is shaky and crappy... I think I'm gonna go puke now.
on some deleted poem
25 Feb 2006, 1:31 AM
The sestina is a difficult form to work with. With that said... This is an excellent sestina!! I shall study along with others to best figure out how to improve my sestina...
on ~PROM MEANS 2 ME~ by T. Jonathron Remp
27 Feb 2006, 12:07 AM
Hmm... someone sounds pretty bitter. I'm not feeling what you're saying, but you do get your point across OK. This sounds like something that can be used in some sort of song. Also, this is not a sestina.
on What Hobbit songs are really like... by Bobjim
1 Mar 2006, 11:17 PM
Interesting...
on Highgate Cemetery by longships
27 Feb 2006, 3:28 PM
I'm really feeling this...
on Whalecrack by wlshepherd
1 Mar 2006, 12:20 AM
You rated me a 4? If this... 'poem' is any indication, your skills are weak... you wouldn't even log on and comment on it... if it's so horrible, why not tell me what you found so screwed up... offer some constructive criticism or something... don't just go on some anonymous BS...
Now... this poem has no purpose... it sounds like a poem parody or something... it's garbage... There's no deep meaning or even a surface meaning... Scrap this and come with something your abilities can create if you spent more time on it... I'll give you a two just for posting this junk.
Now... this poem has no purpose... it sounds like a poem parody or something... it's garbage... There's no deep meaning or even a surface meaning... Scrap this and come with something your abilities can create if you spent more time on it... I'll give you a two just for posting this junk.
on Reach for the Nightmare by longships
1 Mar 2006, 7:04 PM
Question: Is this about Iraq?
You're not a very nice person, and your poetry follows your attitude - it's not nice either.