replying on Pain by terbenaw
9 Mar 2006, 3:12 AM
Good point... I'll try to apply that thought throughout the entire poem. Thanks.
replying on AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
9 Mar 2006, 3:10 AM
It doesn't... I decided to start posting with some earlier work, figuring that with proper critiquing I can create something beyond the teenage "I'm mad at the world and wanna wallow in misery" bit...
replying on Ode to necrophilia by Bobjim
9 Mar 2006, 3:01 AM
You need to seek professional help...
replying on Ode to necrophilia by Bobjim
9 Mar 2006, 3:01 AM
I think you are... veggie burger anyone?
replying on ~PROM MEANS 2 ME~ by T. Jonathron Remp
9 Mar 2006, 2:59 AM
No offense man, but... all the Latin aside, this is not a sestina by POETIC STANDARDS. I care not of the root origins of the word, nor of what led you to believe that this is actually a sestina. The fact of the matter is: This is an Acroustic, not a Sestina. I did not base my definition off of kaolin fire's description of a sestina. Look it up ANYWHERE outside of your mind, and you will find that I am correct. If you find a site that disagrees, post it for us all to see. I'm sure we all would like to know what a sestina really is...
on What Hobbit songs are really like... by Bobjim
1 Mar 2006, 11:17 PM
Interesting...
on Reach for the Nightmare by longships
1 Mar 2006, 7:04 PM
Question: Is this about Iraq?
on Whalecrack by wlshepherd
1 Mar 2006, 12:20 AM
You rated me a 4? If this... 'poem' is any indication, your skills are weak... you wouldn't even log on and comment on it... if it's so horrible, why not tell me what you found so screwed up... offer some constructive criticism or something... don't just go on some anonymous BS...
Now... this poem has no purpose... it sounds like a poem parody or something... it's garbage... There's no deep meaning or even a surface meaning... Scrap this and come with something your abilities can create if you spent more time on it... I'll give you a two just for posting this junk.
Now... this poem has no purpose... it sounds like a poem parody or something... it's garbage... There's no deep meaning or even a surface meaning... Scrap this and come with something your abilities can create if you spent more time on it... I'll give you a two just for posting this junk.
on Highgate Cemetery by longships
27 Feb 2006, 3:28 PM
I'm really feeling this...
on ~PROM MEANS 2 ME~ by T. Jonathron Remp
27 Feb 2006, 12:07 AM
Hmm... someone sounds pretty bitter. I'm not feeling what you're saying, but you do get your point across OK. This sounds like something that can be used in some sort of song. Also, this is not a sestina.
on Hailing Miriam by Ranger
25 Feb 2006, 1:53 PM
I happen to enjoy this poem as is. Great flowing rhythm, excellent imagery. I do, however, agree with the others who have stated that replacing Lorelei with someone readers can relate to either Mary or the location of the poem. Excellent work though.
on Ode to necrophilia by Bobjim
25 Feb 2006, 1:24 AM
Are you trying to make the worst poem I've read? If so, you've succeeded. Besides the fact that the poem is sickening in its message, its design is shaky and crappy... I think I'm gonna go puke now.
on Pillosophy by Bobjim
25 Feb 2006, 1:20 AM
A bit obscure don't you think? It might help if you elaborate a bit on what you mean. Also... can't a person support oneself with both pills and philosophy?