In response, to clarify, I capitalized the "A" for a reason. I want it to be read 2 different ways. Well, maybe not quite so different but if you read it again, you may see what I mean. That is also why I left the 'y' lowercase. I do that a lot in my poems, should you come across it again.

The word "spell" was also repititious for a reason.


I agree with you that the reader might not be clear on what the poem is about, however my intention is to hopefully guide the reader into coming to their own conclusion in regards to how my words portray one portion of what may be going on in their life.

Anyway, thanks for the comments and I hope mine might have cleared some things up for you.

a little to obvious and high school for my taste.

jealous much?

Although I'm not a big fan of rhyme like this, I liked some of the imagery, in particular "My ceiling holds secrets concealed..."

concise and beautiful

I liked the imagery but I got a little mixed and turned around while reading this. However, I think if you cleaned it up some, it would take away from the poem instead of adding to it. I think it's one of those that I have to keep reading several times over.

haha...cute

you seem infatuated with all things "gay"

You could use a new vocabulary, and seemingly, a new personality as well.