replying on The Stickmen of Fools by embersandenvelopes
14 Jun 2004, 10:06 PM
haha, well, I don't happen to think that at all. I just got tired of watching everyone throw the word "guff" around.
replying on To Be Happy by embersandenvelopes
25 Apr 2004, 3:18 PM
and all because I used "be happy". Tsk tsk
replying on To Be Happy by embersandenvelopes
25 Apr 2004, 3:16 PM
I should hope so, considering I wrote it. Let me clarify for you
"memories" is referring to the notes from the first line. I have this box of old letters, notes, pictures, etc- it's called my Memory Box. The other person in the poem tore these notes up, reducing them to shreds, which is where the "reduced" part comes in. "Distaste" refers to his displeasure.
Basically I'm saying that even though he physically tore the notes up, which were representations of my memories, he couldn't destroy the memories themselves and he wasn't entitled to keep control of them simply because he took out his emotions on them.
"memories" is referring to the notes from the first line. I have this box of old letters, notes, pictures, etc- it's called my Memory Box. The other person in the poem tore these notes up, reducing them to shreds, which is where the "reduced" part comes in. "Distaste" refers to his displeasure.
Basically I'm saying that even though he physically tore the notes up, which were representations of my memories, he couldn't destroy the memories themselves and he wasn't entitled to keep control of them simply because he took out his emotions on them.
replying on The Stems of Roses by embersandenvelopes
12 Apr 2004, 9:14 AM
hehe no, don't worry, I'm not having a rough time. This poem was written with my best friend in mind (that's the we). It's about how when I die, part of me will grow in the roses I envision being planted with my ashes. When a surviving loved one should smell them, memories of my life will be conjured up.
Roses are a type of flower that can be difficult to grow. They need a certain environment and a lot of care. But given those two, they will flourish. I can identify my life with that.
Roses are a type of flower that can be difficult to grow. They need a certain environment and a lot of care. But given those two, they will flourish. I can identify my life with that.
replying on On the Theme of Melted Pianos by embersandenvelopes
11 Apr 2004, 12:13 AM
which seven? I'm not really satisfied with the last 2 lines but I can't think of anywhere else to go with it.
replying on On the Theme of Melted Pianos by embersandenvelopes
9 Apr 2004, 11:44 PM
thank you :) This was one of the poems that came about from my love of a phrase of Pablo Neruda's dealing with the term "melted pianos"
on The MV-perience by Modulo
6 Apr 2004, 9:46 PM
haha...cute
on Breaking Breath by daniella
5 Apr 2004, 8:41 PM
I liked the imagery but I got a little mixed and turned around while reading this. However, I think if you cleaned it up some, it would take away from the poem instead of adding to it. I think it's one of those that I have to keep reading several times over.
on the rhyming one by nugit15
5 Apr 2004, 8:33 PM
Although I'm not a big fan of rhyme like this, I liked some of the imagery, in particular "My ceiling holds secrets concealed..."
on Biological Excuse by psikosis
5 Apr 2004, 12:47 AM
a little to obvious and high school for my taste.
replying on From the Top of Apartment Stairwells by embersandenvelopes
5 Apr 2004, 12:33 AM
The original title is actually (Every word I never said) From the Top of Apartment Stairwells
replying on Scattered Spaces by embersandenvelopes
5 Apr 2004, 12:31 AM
use your imagination :)
replying on Jesus-f-ingChrist I'm Sober by embersandenvelopes
5 Apr 2004, 12:26 AM
If you noticed, I didn't sensor the word "shit". Maybe it has less to do with my repressive culture and more to do with making a point you didn't grasp? Perhaps this is due to you focusing too much on repressive cultures and less on the words between words.
on Dreams and Galaxies by embersandenvelopes
1 Apr 2004, 1:40 AM
In response, to clarify, I capitalized the "A" for a reason. I want it to be read 2 different ways. Well, maybe not quite so different but if you read it again, you may see what I mean. That is also why I left the 'y' lowercase. I do that a lot in my poems, should you come across it again.
The word "spell" was also repititious for a reason.
I agree with you that the reader might not be clear on what the poem is about, however my intention is to hopefully guide the reader into coming to their own conclusion in regards to how my words portray one portion of what may be going on in their life.
Anyway, thanks for the comments and I hope mine might have cleared some things up for you.
The word "spell" was also repititious for a reason.
I agree with you that the reader might not be clear on what the poem is about, however my intention is to hopefully guide the reader into coming to their own conclusion in regards to how my words portray one portion of what may be going on in their life.
Anyway, thanks for the comments and I hope mine might have cleared some things up for you.