on Pennies by woodstock20000
22 Feb 2005, 6:47 PM
Do you really want that many periods in the last 5 lines?
I kind of like it, against my will.
I kind of like it, against my will.
replying on Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet
22 Feb 2005, 6:39 PM
Layed is awful. I have never even seen "layed" before, not that that makes it awful, hehehehehheehehehehe, hit him with your hardest marshmallow, still laughing at that one.
on The Plane of War by MacFrantic
22 Feb 2005, 8:06 AM
and the wormy piles of colons strewn across the land
glistened
like thin wet rats
and nobody listened.
the side of the bus read "fuck off" and so i did,
and spilled my drippings
on the bloody red madness of the day
in a skirt
glistened
like thin wet rats
and nobody listened.
the side of the bus read "fuck off" and so i did,
and spilled my drippings
on the bloody red madness of the day
in a skirt
on Hunter Thompson, In The Off Beat Chance Of Cunnilingus by horus8
22 Feb 2005, 7:17 AM
not too carefully, I hope, or that 300 dismissal lingers, smoking a camel, right around the corner!
I wonder about the words "venerated" and "fiasco", and whether you might not find something that crystalizes what you mean there a bit better.
This was an absolute delight to read. It purred down the screen, finely oiled, smelling vaguely of Big Mac droppings and fat cubans.
Your hair was dark and short. Nice touch. Just excellent writing and a 10
When are you due back to AP? Are you even coming back? I hope so. Things have grown a bit dull in your absence, and in the void you left, I am being attacked by all the illiterate teeny boppers, "U R an Ass. Do you get off mAkIng fun of kids with ADD?" etc etc etc...Also, I have some problems with the sound on my PC, so can't listen to the music you send me. Shame that. Trying to remedy
I wonder about the words "venerated" and "fiasco", and whether you might not find something that crystalizes what you mean there a bit better.
This was an absolute delight to read. It purred down the screen, finely oiled, smelling vaguely of Big Mac droppings and fat cubans.
Your hair was dark and short. Nice touch. Just excellent writing and a 10
When are you due back to AP? Are you even coming back? I hope so. Things have grown a bit dull in your absence, and in the void you left, I am being attacked by all the illiterate teeny boppers, "U R an Ass. Do you get off mAkIng fun of kids with ADD?" etc etc etc...Also, I have some problems with the sound on my PC, so can't listen to the music you send me. Shame that. Trying to remedy
on Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet
22 Feb 2005, 7:07 AM
what?????
the whole metaphor is a bit silly, and that is good.
and that rhyme at the end is funny, heart to choke
never to bloom artichoke. I like artichoke hearts in a nice oily pasta salad, virgin and salami, some garden fresh cherry tomatoes and buffalo mozzarella, fresh of course.
and that rhyme at the end is funny, heart to choke
never to bloom artichoke. I like artichoke hearts in a nice oily pasta salad, virgin and salami, some garden fresh cherry tomatoes and buffalo mozzarella, fresh of course.
replying on Dictionary Lesson by Dovina
19 Nov 2004, 4:48 PM
I have to disagree with your apparent assessment of Zodiac's poems. If you actually READ them, I think you will find they do not lack feeling, nor art.
replying on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina
12 Nov 2004, 3:35 PM
To quote the inimitable Jroday, for all future students of the man's profoundly influencial poetry..."truth is more than a mental exercise"
replying on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina
12 Nov 2004, 12:32 PM
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on Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) by Bachus
10 Nov 2004, 7:46 PM
smut
replying on Ebony shadow by Twiggy77
10 Nov 2004, 10:48 AM
sorry, I meant ~~~-=Learnede_Behavioure=-~~~
replying on Ebony shadow by Twiggy77
10 Nov 2004, 10:47 AM
when you are born, you know nothing. Therefore farting is learned behaviour.
replying on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina
10 Nov 2004, 10:43 AM
Anyway, I love it.