Gwae fi fy myw mewn oes mor ddreng
A Duw ar drai ar orwel pell;
O'i ôl mae dyn, yn deyrn a gwreng,
Yn codi ei awdurdod hell.

Pan deimlodd fyned ymaith Dduw
Cyfododd gledd i ladd ei frawd;
Mae swn yr ymladd ar ein clyw,
A'i gysgod ar fythynnod tlawd.

Mae'r hen delynau genid gynt
Ynghrog ar gangau'r helyg draw,
A gwaed y bechgyn lond y gwynt,
A'u gwaed yn gymysg efo'r glaw.

very. lots of interesting observations on the origin and purpose of language

I've read his Serendipity

Daggar's a typo. Damn votes will erase if I change it tho.

Using spake for spoke would be completely inappropriate since this poem is somewhat more colloquial than that (at least it's meant to be.) Rosalía de Castro was the first poet in centuries to write in her native Galician, (which is not unlike medieval portuguese) rather than Spanish. Thus her poetry, like Sappho's, is filled with colloquialisms mixed in with slight (and I do mean slight) archaisms. So spake for spoke would be completely out of place in a translation of DeCastro

when I wrote this I had had 3 long island ice teas, one glass of coffee flavoured liquor, a sleep-deprived 48 hours, and I don't even know how much beer. So I think that answers your question of what I was on.

Good day

actually, I find that all quite funny.

Now, if you don't mind, I'll go back to the things that matter

That's actually quite thought provoking....which, in light of your comment, is very dirty

you're apparently on poemranker to "win." I'm not sure what you plan to win exactly, maybe everyone else's approval? Would you like them to nodd their heads and say "now there's a poet who can give quick answers on a site?" Are you that starved for attention?

By the way, you forgot the apostrophe in bow'ls.

Begging your pardon, but who said this was a contest for "victory?"

No I edited the last two lines.

I'm not on a crusade. I have no self-denial with respect to whether I am retaliating or not. Psychoanalyzing what I "want to believe" won't work, though you're welcome to keep trying if you'd like.

Besides, I like writing in a "classical" fashion. I was simply curious as to why, since it wasn't really your thing, you used a piece of it in an otherise colloquial poem and saying what I thought of it. That's all. Really.

Okay. I'm done being serious

I'm not on a crusade. I have no self-denial with respect to whether I am retaliating or not. Psychoanalyzing what I "want to believe" won't work, though you're welcome to keep trying if you'd like.

Besides, I like writing in a "classical" fashion. I was simply curious as to why, since it wasn't really your thing, you used a piece of it in an otherise colloquial poem and saying what I thought of it. That's all. Really.

Okay. I'm done being serious

I'm not on a crusade. I have no self-denial with respect to whether I am retaliating or not. Psychoanalyzing what I "want to believe" won't work, though you're welcome to keep trying if you'd like.

Besides, I like writing in a "classical" fashion. I was simply curious as to why, since it wasn't really your thing, you used a piece of it in an otherise colloquial poem and saying what I thought of it. That's all. Really.

Okay. I'm done being serious

No. I edited the poem with your critique in mind. If you haven't noticed all votes get erased when you edit.

You're welcome.


Marm? as in school-marm?? You''re funny, you really are. If as you said you were using the phrase to fit the rhymescheme, you were forcing a rhyme which isnot a good thing. If, on the other hand, you actually speak with constructions such as "hat so drear" in the same conversation as "black ole stones" then I really am a slim tube.

I'm curious, if the black stones are "ole" then why isn't the dark "solitary 'n cole?"

I'm not retaliating, nor am I so high on my pedestal that I can't take criticism. I can. If all I wanted was for a bunch of mind-numbed web-addicts to praise my work ad nauseam stultificationis, I'd have gone to allpoetry or some other online compliment-generator for poets.

Of my own poem.