on profile of an abuser by inka
10 Jan 2003, 8:35 PM
It would be a better poem if you took out all the self-censorship and put in the real swear words you were using. It would hit harder. Never self-censor. It cuts the oomph out of your poetry.
on That feeling by trisha
7 Jan 2003, 10:00 AM
This has intensity but you should really not use "u" instead of "you." It's grating and annoying. Nice description of depression, though.
replying on Midnight in the Garden by Cha no Onna
7 Jan 2003, 9:49 AM
I gave it a name. Thanks for the vote. :)
If you didn't see it earlier, cha no onna means woman of tea in Japanese.
If you didn't see it earlier, cha no onna means woman of tea in Japanese.
on The Fire Burns Bright (an Ode to Kaolin) by <~>
3 Jan 2003, 3:28 PM
It's cool that he did it and she said yes. Congrats to Kaolin and his fiancee - may the marriage be a happy one. Nice poem too.
replying on Dammit by Cha no Onna
3 Jan 2003, 3:23 PM
I found it! It was in an old box in the garage. YAY! It's now on Poemranker. And in my diary. And on my hard drive. Just in case.
replying on Cour by Cha no Onna
3 Jan 2003, 3:19 PM
I would like to find poetry in the conventional. Too many people try to use words as unconventionally as possible. It's at times like this that the meanings of words becomes twisted, and the poetry, un-understandable. If you want to see me being "unconventional," check out Autophage. No one got that one at all.
replying on Silence by Cha no Onna
3 Dec 2002, 11:24 AM
Oh. Just a few then. All done. Thanks for telling me that.
replying on Silence by Cha no Onna
3 Dec 2002, 10:36 AM
thank you. I appreciate your comments.
You are right; it should be "I wish I could sing to you the songs they sing to each other." Unfortunately, if I edit it, I'll lose your comments and Caducus's too.
You are right; it should be "I wish I could sing to you the songs they sing to each other." Unfortunately, if I edit it, I'll lose your comments and Caducus's too.
on Persephone by Lynn
21 Nov 2002, 4:20 PM
It's nice to see one of your poems here. You're really very talented. You should post more.
replying on Hey! by Cha no Onna
8 Oct 2002, 5:22 PM
Yeah ... I think the people who said it sucked were some of the aforementioned pigeons ... it's more commentary than poetry.
replying on Cour by Cha no Onna
8 Oct 2002, 5:21 PM
Female, actually. Do you think you could say anything with any sort of *content?*
replying on To You by Cha no Onna
8 Oct 2002, 5:20 PM
What?
replying on To You by Cha no Onna
8 Oct 2002, 5:20 PM
It's always annoying when people leave bad comments anonymously ... *sigh* Anyway. The theme here is that my friend sucked. What was so great was that at one point my friend didn't suck. Could I be to blame? Well, I wasn't very understanding when said friend tried to kill herself in my house. So I guess so.
replying on Dammit by Cha no Onna
8 Oct 2002, 5:17 PM
No, it was on paper. It's STILL missing. :(
replying on For fun by Cha no Onna
8 Oct 2002, 5:16 PM
The first is from Where the Sidewalk Ends and is called "For Sale," and the second, I don't know where it's from, but it goes
Oh what shall I do
Oh what shall I do
This library book is
42 years overdue
I admit that it's mine
But I can't pay the fine!
Oh what shall I do!
Oh what shall I do
Oh what shall I do
This library book is
42 years overdue
I admit that it's mine
But I can't pay the fine!
Oh what shall I do!
replying on Autophage by Cha no Onna
8 Oct 2002, 5:14 PM
It's not "bellies." It's "belies," a different word.
Belies, Belied: To picture falsely, to misrepresent. (www.dictionary.com)
Belies, Belied: To picture falsely, to misrepresent. (www.dictionary.com)
replying on Ifni's birthday by Cha no Onna
8 Oct 2002, 5:12 PM
But Ifni, don't you know you're "damn cute" constantly!
Not just when you're "Goth."
Not just when you're "Goth."
replying on Loneliness by Cha no Onna
8 Oct 2002, 5:12 PM
You're cute!
replying on Loneliness by Cha no Onna
8 Oct 2002, 5:11 PM
I wrote this poem 12 years ago when I was 15. Yeah, it needs work.
on Social Parody by skaskowski
1 May 2002, 2:00 PM
I also like the first three lines but don't get the last one.