<just let> <some shit> <not have> <to always> <be about> <god devil> <cunt cock> <nice sock> <just you> <thank you> For nothing, but that constantly evaporated feeling of receding, and diminishing into something else that has to do with you. You, and nothing else. Just you, yes, you. You, and yours, such wealth smiled stealth. I want to be you. Tell your people about you. Mock you! Say I know you, to tow you, around. I, your blessed shadow boxer burn out. Your elbows and knees exfoliated free. Then you'll see how you are the only one I see, I see, I see through your skirt, and flesh and marrow, I see... No worth in... Tommorrow... Without you... CUT! <{And violently rootless my love}> <{violent 'rootless' my lo-}> <{-lent 'rootless' my}> <{rootlessness'}> <{rootofmy}> <{ego}> ---" /> <just let> <some shit> <not have> <to always> <be about> <god devil> <cunt cock> <nice sock> <just you> <thank you> For nothing, but that constantly evaporated feeling of receding, and diminishing into something else that has to do with you. You, and nothing else. Just you, yes, you. You, and yours, such wealth smiled stealth. I want to be you. Tell your people about you. Mock you! Say I know you, to tow you, around. I, your blessed shadow boxer burn out. Your elbows and knees exfoliated free. Then you'll see how you are the only one I see, I see, I see through your skirt, and flesh and marrow, I see... No worth in... Tommorrow... Without you... CUT! <{And violently rootless my love}> <{violent 'rootless' my lo-}> <{-lent 'rootless' my}> <{rootlessness'}> <{rootofmy}> <{ego}> ---" />
poemranker ::Hey! Shut up, and cut my grass. by horus8

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Hey! Shut up, and cut my grass.

Member since 2002 · Posted 22 Aug 2002 · Edited 19 Apr 2003 · 17 comments

Mowed for sanity. A lawn for the first time in nearly six years. Front and back, and even the sides. The grass tending ritual has not changed very much, but I have. We both needed water when it was all over. It, more so than I. Is There a noble meaning behind the act of grooming. It promotes blooming I'm assuming. I currently have a bloody hole in my stomach. That statement is telesematic. Being too analytical apparently does have a down side. Constantly worrying mentally has begun to surface physically. Guess that I should have respected more, the back seat, and kept my, trap shut, sewed my, lid shut Learned how to not say but-but I can't <typo> $grass$ ^^^^^^^^ He's swell, Cracked bell, It is all water, from the same well. What am I afraid of ? Disease carrying insects. Twilight zone on DVD in B&W. unaware of my filthy receptacle. Who, or what, I can and can't affect. I am going to take off while I still can. Being a complacent young man that can "coolit". With an exquisitely decorated oriental flip fan for Nero. I wonder how many years will pass by again before I stumble on another lawn that I'm forced to mow, water, hoe. Zero. Fascicle. Pure-blood. Topknot. Carbon 14. Antiparticle. Merry-go-round. Water-table. Incontrovertable. Chevalier. Pretzel. Suffocate. Abstractionalist. <can't you> <just let> <some shit> <not have> <to always> <be about> <god devil> <cunt cock> <nice sock> <just you> <thank you> For nothing, but that constantly evaporated feeling of receding, and diminishing into something else that has to do with you. You, and nothing else. Just you, yes, you. You, and yours, such wealth smiled stealth. I want to be you. Tell your people about you. Mock you! Say I know you, to tow you, around. I, your blessed shadow boxer burn out. Your elbows and knees exfoliated free. Then you'll see how you are the only one I see, I see, I see through your skirt, and flesh and marrow, I see... No worth in... Tommorrow... Without you... CUT! <{And violently rootless my love}> <{violent 'rootless' my lo-}> <{-lent 'rootless' my}> <{rootlessness'}> <{rootofmy}> <{ego}> ---

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[6] poetandknowit 22-Aug-02/7:00 PM Reply
Fuck, do you like burn calories when you write this stuff. It makes me sweat just reading it!
[7] Christof 23-Aug-02/4:25 AM Reply
The first part of this is truly great - the rest sort of tails off into your customary madness - but the metaphor of the lawn is bloody fantastic.
[7] Christof 23-Aug-02/4:26 AM Reply
Actually, not sure that it's a metaphor on another reading, but it's still fantastic.
[9] deleted user 23-Aug-02/8:07 AM Reply
this really barrels along at a pace and a half. one line doesn't fit, for me: "Ignorant rigged electorials." and i think the rambling works very well, although i'm missing the scheme of the shape.
[8] brazen 23-Aug-02/10:22 AM Reply
the side brackets in the middle got "we didn't start the fire" stuck in my head...good show.
[6] poetandknowit 23-Aug-02/3:28 PM Reply
And here I thought this was a huge uni-tit woman decapitated by the alien controlled errant lawnmower blade, with an anorexic waste from eating the grass while the mower was in the shop and a skirt the would make Freud proud. I guess I was wrong.
[7] god'swife 25-Sep-02/8:59 PM Reply
Oh my oh my oh my. To find myself hidden among rotting blades. Joey just asked me what m-a-s-o-c-h-i-s-m spells.
[n/a] Tintagiles › god'swife 25-Sep-02/9:00 PM Reply
Dare one ask what you replied?
[7] god'swife › Tintagiles 25-Sep-02/9:06 PM Reply
I tell him the truth, being penniless, it's all I have to offer.
[n/a] Tintagiles › god'swife 25-Sep-02/9:50 PM Reply
And didst thou define it for him?
[7] god'swife › Tintagiles 25-Sep-02/10:13 PM Reply
Someone who likes pain, or needs it.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › god'swife 21-Apr-03/4:13 AM Reply
pff
[6] poetandknowit 25-Sep-02/10:17 PM Reply
I have got to hear you read this stuff one day.
[8] New Life Drug 4-Oct-02/9:22 PM Reply
You're so fuckin weird... this one's cool
[9] INTRANSIT 20-Apr-03/3:40 PM Reply
Thank Jesu for the almighty rant! To keep us all grouded.
[7] Caducus 21-Apr-03/2:29 AM Reply
This one got my pants in a flymo, very cutting (literally)
[0] unnesessary 10-Sep-04/10:34 PM Reply
Very boring!!!