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Eagledale Drive

by klosterfobik

Member since 2004 · Posted 24 Aug 2004 · Edited 30 Sep 2004 · 13 comments

Just drove by 30th and Eagledale Drive. Can you believe Mr.Hickman's still alive? Can you believe the gray wind of used to be and winter? And just the other day - when I was nine on a yellow bike by Danberry Drive, running away with skinned knees and innocence. In 79 I knew the beauty of suntanned now - the simple perfect of hazel eyes. The great mystery of railroad tracks - the apocalypse dusk. And I'd run back home through the Brown's backyard, back home to my childhood god, to the cluttered heaven of then, with dirty hands and surety.

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[8] Dovina 24-Aug-04/5:34 PM Reply
A nostalgic neighborhood tour with lots of questions for one not acquainted with yours. Mine is very clear too.
[n/a] klosterfobik › Dovina 25-Aug-04/9:16 PM Reply
I know,I thought they were all kind of the same though - just different names and places?
[8] nentwined 27-Aug-04/2:54 PM Reply
very evocative, though I find I want to know more how you were lost. Is it just the time?

I like the line "Can you believe the gray wind of used to be and winter?"

"simple perfect" -> "simple perfection"? Or are you making a grammatical pun of some sort that I'm failing to get?
[n/a] klosterfobik › nentwined 28-Aug-04/7:39 PM Reply
Just a grammatical pun - thought it rolled of the tongue quite well.My Grandma's name was Hazel - she was my childhood god.
She loved me so much but I kind of drifted from her.She died before I could tell her how much I cared about her.I did'nt lose
her - she lost me when I ran away.All my fault....that's why I'm sorry.
[0] Bachus 11-Sep-04/5:36 PM Reply
you
[0] horus8 14-Sep-04/11:45 PM Reply
Let it rain!
[0] Shardik 15-Sep-04/11:33 AM Reply
From
[0] <{Baba^Yaga}> 15-Sep-04/2:34 PM Reply
Craparoni soufle
[10] deleted user › <{Baba^Yaga}> 17-Sep-04/7:24 PM Reply
Jeremi Handjob - you're such an infant!
[n/a] klosterfobik › <{Baba^Yaga}> 18-Sep-04/7:54 PM Reply
Jerry-was-me - you know what's funny?
Time will tell!
Far past this sad little site!
[n/a] klosterfobik › klosterfobik 18-Sep-04/7:56 PM Reply
That's what's funny.
[0] horus8 30-Sep-04/3:44 PM Reply
A laquered quail in pose.
[9] INTRANSIT 1-Oct-04/6:26 AM Reply
And someone has the gall to slap you with a one? Ha on them.