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Free verse № 114992

Fair Dianne

by Dovina

Member since 2004 · Posted 5 Nov 2004 · 9 comments

Bricks fly, pummeling those she’s marked unkind. Snarling teeth yank at entrails. Look out for Fair Dianne when her hair-trigger snaps.

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[9] Dan garcia-Black 5-Nov-04/11:54 PM Reply
I heard someone say this once tonight already but I think it bears repeating. "It seems a tad short. Any chance you might stretch it a bit?"
[n/a] Dovina › Dan garcia-Black 6-Nov-04/6:31 AM Reply
I’ll say it one more time, please listen. It does seem a tad short, but you’d not like the outcome of a longer version.
[10] zodiac 6-Nov-04/5:12 AM Reply
Should be categorized "Barely Veiled Rant about Getting Your Poems Trashed on Poemranker". I'll be writing nentwined to have such a category created and all backlogged poems in this vein belatedly entered in it. You can be our queen.
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 6-Nov-04/6:32 AM Reply
It takes more than that to snap this trigger. Besides, your queen would prefer a paradelle to a pummeling, whereas I find them about the same.
[10] zodiac › Dovina 7-Nov-04/12:33 AM Reply
I don't know what you mean. I was being serious :-(
[10] zodiac › Dovina 7-Nov-04/12:37 AM Reply
This dog I've seen here likes to run into traffic. It must have been hit about a half-dozen times, is missing a leg, ear, and teeth, etc. I imagine it thinks life is this same steady and unstoppable string of pummellings for everybody. The other dogs, the ones who don't run in traffic, don't say anything - or it doesn't believe them when they do.
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 7-Nov-04/9:33 AM Reply
Dumb doggie. Guess it's in his nature.
[10] zodiac › Dovina 8-Nov-04/4:03 AM Reply
I love people who say things are in their own or other people's natures. I could kiss you now.
[n/a] Dovina › zodiac 8-Nov-04/9:47 AM Reply
It's so nice to be loved for my nature, and it happens so very often here on Poemranker that I tend to become inconsiderate. But please Mr. Z, you're a married man.