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The Small Ones

Member since 2004 · Posted 21 Mar 2007 · Edited 21 Mar 2007 · 7 comments

The old ones dawdle very small, primordial simpletons who judge by touch and change themselves with changing world. Four billion years they’ve come of age. and sense the young of just ten million. Unseasoned, brainy and complex, the new ones strut the land not settled, not staid in middle age, inclined to think life has a point. The old ones watch the youthful oddity, endowed with intoxicating life, telling a story, a long upward chain, pointed toward complexity, destined toward excellence, in a word—toward them. The old ones continue doing what they do. Life just is—no scheming, only wait and watch this evolutionary equivalent of spiked hair and tongue studs, an existing design remodeled, an interesting elaboration, not as strange as barnacles, nor grotesque as a termite queen. The old ones seem to know that for their effort to survive, species only crumble, die routinely— the more complex, the quicker, which is why they, The Small Ones, win. They mutate capriciously in hiding, as if awaiting opportunity, then as if having built an improvised explosive device burst forth in catastrophe, and the young oddities scramble for cover. Not many things survive for long. without a guiding hand. We thinking things are merely flukes— an interesting branch.

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[10] Stephen Robins 22-Mar-07/9:58 AM Reply
This poem makes light of the deeply fecund stirrings of the author whilst, almost unbelievably, illustrating the juvenile chauvinism that most men exhibit to their womenfolk. Truly, a Duchy Original hobnob perched on the side of a eunuch's head could not create more worrying signs of modern day degradation than the impassioned twittering of this middle aged proto-crone.
[n/a] Dovina › Stephen Robins 22-Mar-07/2:21 PM Reply
This it truly the most accurate description of one of my poems you have, in all your past blubbering and squirting, presented. The “crone” characterization of the narrator is, of course, unfounded and irrelevant, but probably necessary as inner justification for outer wrinkled flab.
[7] Ranger 22-Mar-07/1:33 PM Reply
I liked the idea of the evolutionary equivalent of spiked hair and tongue studs, and the two lines about barnacles and termite queens are good. The rest sort of lost me. I am not in a very perceptive mood tonight though, so you shall have to forgive me.
[n/a] Dovina › Ranger 22-Mar-07/2:23 PM Reply
I may choose to forgive you, but as a complex, thinking oddity on a new twig of the life tree, I reserve for myself freedom to tread otherwise.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Dovina 22-Mar-07/5:34 PM Reply
Certain freedoms you may reserve for yourself, but not the freedom to write about barnacles without a barnacle licence.
[n/a] Dovina › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 23-Mar-07/10:19 AM Reply
May I see your prawne license, sir?
[9] Skamper 23-Mar-07/9:34 PM Reply
Middle-age takes another step toward the doddering of those past thinking, while the young, who survive become the wise - all heads now nodding.

Fabulous write and imaginative story-telling.