poemranker ::#12 by mikejedw

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Haiku № 1978

#12

by mikejedw

Member since 2002 · Posted 14 May 2002 · 4 comments

elm, undulating beneath the over lit sky-- Jersey City night

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4 comments

[8] hoopoe 19-May-02/3:22 AM Reply
nice combination of the disparate elements, and what they both are.. but not very very..... but i love
elm, undulating ...
[9] Robert K Foster 17-Sep-02/6:20 AM Reply
nicely done once again
[8] <~> 17-Sep-02/6:51 AM Reply
this is one sexy summer night poem.
[5] nentwined 19-Apr-04/10:33 PM Reply
over-lit, I think.

doesn't do enough for me, though it does seem to be a start, the more I ponder on it. I think undulating may be less descriptive of the jersey city night than befits its number of syllables. But I really don't have any suggestions--just my reaction.