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Free verse № 2345

In Vein

by nentwined

Member since 2001 · Posted 21 May 2002 · Edited 7 Aug 2002 · 11 comments

enough with this self-dejection infection of lethargy melancholic YELLOW cholera dyspeptic -- I need an injection of that WATERCOLOR life with supranormal pigmentation of all the hues of the imagination; enough with this pragmatic fragmentation -- give me poetry (set me free to wander my veins) as it rains PURPLE ideas (to hurl exuberance) let me be (let me see) set me free!

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[7] deleted user 22-May-02/12:41 AM Reply
watercolor just leaped out at me. Really liked the second two stanzas. Something about the first didn't work for me.
[6] forestchild7 19-Jul-02/4:37 PM Reply
hmmm... interesting...
[n/a] deleted user 8-Aug-02/1:18 PM Reply
reminded me of a Tool song. not a bad thing.
[9] tandem 9-Sep-02/7:35 PM Reply
really enjoyed the second stanza and the basic flow between the first and second..nice work
[8] livingcanvas 12-Sep-02/11:36 AM Reply
i hate people that sit down with their thesaurus when writing. it's too easy to notice too, noone really speaks like this. i like your poem, but come on, stop trying to impress people and just write. 3
[n/a] nentwined › livingcanvas 12-Sep-02/11:37 AM Reply
sorry. I actually do speak like this, but ... I understand your point. thanks for the thought. :)
[n/a] nentwined › livingcanvas 12-Sep-02/11:38 AM Reply
mind you, I don't always know the proper definitions of words I use, and sometimes it slips me up.
[n/a] nentwined › livingcanvas 12-Sep-02/11:39 AM Reply
and happy birthday. :)
[n/a] nentwined › nentwined 12-Sep-02/11:40 AM Reply
err, off by a month, wasn't I? 8, 9, what's the difference? fuck, and why won't I shut up? ARGH!
[8] livingcanvas › nentwined 12-Sep-02/11:50 AM Reply
hahaha... it's cool... my own mother just called a few days ago remembering it... now i remember why we don't speak...
[8] livingcanvas › nentwined 12-Sep-02/11:49 AM Reply
i understand if you do use extensive vocabulary. but also, i think that you should understand that writing is best conveyed when it's able to be read by most 'average' readers. however, i did still enjoy your poem, and thank you for your kind response, and for acknowledging my recent b-day... =) two big respective thumbs up to you.