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you will feel

Member since 2001 · Posted 27 Mar 2003 · 10 comments

you will feel my pain every ounce, every FLUID ounce of every drop of my blood as every razor scar erupts: one giant burst of ecstasy-- I AM HERE! and now I'm gone.

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10 comments

[6] Jeremi B. Handrinos 27-Mar-03/11:45 AM Reply

I have always been founder of the brave puncturer not the teasing mutilator.

[3] thepinkbunnyofdoom 27-Mar-03/5:02 PM Reply

I must say I thought that was going to be good just from your first line but nope. Not really sure what went wrong but it ended up a trainwreck. -3-

[6] Caducus 28-Mar-03/8:42 AM Reply

Scenes of full metal jacket emerged

[7] Frass 28-Mar-03/2:05 PM Reply

'as every...' is a strong line, Nntwnd. I think there's more to this poem in your head; I'd like to read it.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 2-Jun-03/4:34 PM Reply

Razor scars, how powerful and sublime.

[8] deleted user 5-Jul-03/12:26 PM Reply

Good. Is it an analogy of death?

[n/a] nentwined › deleted user 7-Jul-03/7:50 AM Reply

Not exactly an analogy; this, now that the category has been created, should more properly be a "pimple poem". It was meant to be a condensed version, saying more the intent of such poems than actually trying to mimic the style. "You hurt me, but I can hurt me more! But I want you to feel my pain! Please? Ha, I'll show you!" :/

[6] LuV_jOhNnY 6-Jan-04/8:06 PM Reply

Spiffy! Very dark. kinda wierded me out though

[3] windyone 25-May-05/4:24 PM Reply

have a good trip

[n/a] nentwined › windyone 25-May-05/4:26 PM Reply

It continues, yes.

Thanks for the three. :)