Lyric № 81523
You've Given Me
You held my hand
When I was afraid
You gave me hope
When I needed aid
You gave me friendship
When I was alone
You gave me love
When none was shown
You gave me understanding
When I was lost
You gave me blessings
No matter the cost
You gave me devotion
When I was weak
You gave me words
When I couldn't speak
You gave me wings
When I couldn't fly
You gave me answers
When I wondered why
You gave me sunlight
When there was rain
You gave me pleasure
When there was pain
You gave me joy
When I was close to death
You gave me life
When I had no breath
You gave me shelter
When I was cold
You gave me your hand
When there was none to hold
You gave me inspiration
When I needed to write
You gave me your pillow
When I couldnt sleep at night
You gave me a dream
So I could awaken from my nightmare
You gave me confidence
When I was in despair
You gave me a soul
When mine was gone
You gave me a reason
So I could move on
You gave me time
When all was still
You gave me the way
When there was no will
You gave me the power
To move on from strife
You gave me bliss
When you entered my life
You gave to me
What I failed to get
You gave me a light
Already lit
You gave me prosperity
Hope and love
But most of all you gave me
Everything I'm dreaming of
Every moment I watch you
In amazement and glee
And remember every little thing
That youve to given me
3 comments
and your rhymes come too fast and blunt
Rework the last two stanzas. 'Everything I'm dreaming of' is too much something that's pulled out when one is at a loss for anything better.
'Amazement + glee' glee? There are better words to use that rhyme with 'me'.
Unfortunately many of your stanzas have been seen and heard before. With the exceptions of S2 + S3 + S4 which I like quite a bit.
I think it's important for people to express this kind of acknowledgement. Love is the most total act of a soul, reflects the nature of the soul. So this person of yours, this Beloved, deserves praise and for me, this kind of literature provides a lesson in loving.
Best of luck. Do try to spread your wings a bit.
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