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Free verse № 828

you're never alone

Member since 2001 · Posted 19 Mar 2002 · 19 comments

in your shell you are hiding ignoring all tidings for the world is afraiding a-fearing a-nearing to driving you sane; a thought is marauding about your brain's lining and your mind is a-burning a-turning and churning, about to release -- but you out-see a thoughtclip that someone else thoughted some ponderance they noted and toted and touted and spread all about, some previous ponderance they needed to shout. that thoughtclip they thoughted is the thought you had oughted to say but you couldn't 'til you found your release and now that they've thoughted the thought that you oughted you see you're a-familied with some other creep. though the thought that was thoughted perhaps was enguttered down deep with the clutter or flying up high in the ether of space, the thought you had thoughted that the other had touted has brought you a bone for the gnawing upon -- you're never alone. though the thought that you thoughted was obtuse beyond meaning or abstracted to some infinitesimal sum the thought that you thoughted has been thoughted by others (though mayhaps the others have not beaten their drums) and so if alone you are ever enthoughtened be familied in thought that you're never alone.

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19 comments

[9] anonymous 21-Mar-02/7:15 PM Reply
Fun to read- Rather Dr. Seussian!
[9] anonymous 11-Apr-02/3:06 AM Reply
Took me a couple of tries to get past the made-up words, but it's interesting. Cheers! Piano
[0] deleted user 12-Jun-02/9:06 PM Reply
you totally keep me uninterested with this. I was not following you at all. Too complex.
[8] -=SeTTle=- 30-Jul-02/8:54 PM Reply
Why must you write poetry that taxes my memory and sanity?? Do you find that funny??
[0] horus8 30-Jul-02/9:17 PM Reply
the rhino shits.its early in the morning as the sun begins to strike the hard green dew soaked plains under Killimanjaro. the hulking beast turns and hesitantly sniffs it's piled shit. the turdpack steams.a gazelle leaps quietly through the high grass. the rhino turns and lumbers off. his horn is up. his "hoof" trot highh
[n/a] nentwined 30-Jul-02/10:53 PM Reply
to settle -- yes, actually, I do. :)
[n/a] nentwined 30-Jul-02/10:54 PM Reply
to horus -- uh, hrm? or is that payback for the poem?
[0] horus8 30-Jul-02/11:16 PM Reply
not at all..i thought that your creating of quick juicy rhetoric was highly provacative..your style flows..your horn is up..your 'hoof' is clean and sharp.. the rhino was pleasedh
[9] Bachus 27-Aug-02/12:51 AM Reply
that's right. love the jibber jabber 9/10!
[9] Bachus 27-Aug-02/12:53 AM Reply
that's right. love the jibber jabber 9/10!
[8] Limness 27-Aug-02/1:10 PM Reply
sleek.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 27-Aug-02/9:13 PM Reply
Every time this appears on my screen, I read the first two lines and then have to actually insert my fist in my mouth so I don't scream. "in your shell you are hiding/ignoring all tidings" What were you thinking? Did you steal that from a 9-year-old's poetry competition?
[9] Bachus 28-Aug-02/5:28 PM Reply
Malthusian.8/10!
[9] Bachus 28-Aug-02/5:59 PM Reply
Malthusian.8/10!
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 29-Aug-02/4:42 PM Reply
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAGH
[9] Bachus 30-Aug-02/8:00 PM Reply
fatti maschii parole femine!
[7] <~> 30-Aug-02/8:11 PM Reply
no deeds, only mad thoughts without gender.
[n/a] vulcan 1-Sep-02/8:12 AM Reply
Never!
[n/a] god'swife 2-Sep-02/9:26 PM Reply
What exactly are you writing about?