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Jesus Wept

by coffeeangel316

Member since 2004 · Posted 5 Mar 2004 · 2 comments

Just as you are, I love you the same Everlasting love is better than flames Seeking my kingdom will warm your heart United in the Gospel, of Matthew and Mark Seek my word to defeat Satan's evil snares Without it you will be in such deep despair Eternal life is what I am offering to you Plus love everlasting, I will see you through Touch me now, I weep for you as I see you do

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[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 5-Mar-04/1:26 PM Reply
With this piece, you have balmilised a dumpling that is Beyond Thunderdome. It fails so utterly, that no amount constructive criticism could hoist it from the plunging U-bend to the giddy heights of a lingering death on the toilet bowl, smeared against the porcelain slopes like a squashed urchin. No my friend, this dropping is destined to remain below the waterline, where it shall wallow and sob in a state of appalling agony until the last days of its miserably short life are utterly spent. It's time to pull the chain and move on, lest the contemplation of one stool should hamper the coiling of t'other. Good try though! -10-
[8] deleted user 6-Mar-04/6:12 PM Reply
kinda funny