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Untitled involves taking pills and cutting with razors

Member since 2004 · Posted 21 Mar 2004 · 13 comments

the razors sharp the pills make my heart race I'm alone on this dark base. No one sees my pain No one sees the scars No one sees my brain activly controlling my thoughts and fears my life of tears. I'm falling I'm dizzy I'm sizzling as I get busy. sitting on my wrist is my razor full of blood a fountain of tears flood. The pills take charge My heart speeds up. I'm falling onto the floor passing by my life passing out passing any chance that I will get up.

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[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 21-Mar-04/3:43 PM Reply

I'm sorry I was mean to you before. I guess we're pretty similar really. I've been cutting myself for three years how about you? I guess I like the feeling of power it gives me. I only wish others could see the pain inside. That's why I like poemranker people really understand here. Tell us your heart. xx

[n/a] AskittlesK › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 21-Mar-04/3:59 PM Reply

o thats alright... i cut myself on and off...sometimes...mostly just for about a year now..
Yeah this poem relates to that and i got suspended like a little less than 2 weeks ago for taking a perscription antidepressant that wasn't mine. And that day when I came home being suspended and it was kind of late and i cut my self and it started bleeding and everything then i just dabbed it on paper. Then I have a feeling I passed out on my bed.. cuz i don't remember falling asleep but i remember waking up. I'm not sure what exactly happended.. But yeah now I'm going to a chemical counsular at school *cuz i have too* .. its a really long story.. but like 20 people got caught with perscription pills that weren't theres. And well since i have to see the chemical counsular for 30 min during 1st per. I think she might then find out that i cut. idk tho
yeah i like poemranker too and other poem sites!
well g2g
-Angie

[7] deleted user 21-Mar-04/4:26 PM Reply

A bit melodramatic, but I can feel it.

[n/a] AskittlesK › deleted user 21-Mar-04/7:39 PM Reply

thank you

[10] wilco 21-Mar-04/4:36 PM Reply

I sincerely hope that you're not really cutting yourself....but if you are then I would like to make the suggestion (perhaps unwanted) that you see your doctor about getting some antidepressants that ARE yours. I did like your poem though, by the way.

[n/a] AskittlesK › wilco 21-Mar-04/7:38 PM Reply

thank you

[7] poemwanker › AskittlesK 22-Mar-04/7:46 AM Reply

Razors and pills are so boring though...try tnt, liven the decor up a bit.

[n/a] AskittlesK › poemwanker 25-Mar-04/7:48 PM Reply

well they weren't boring too me ,..... I just wrote a poem about what exactly pretty much happended.

[7] poemwanker 22-Mar-04/7:49 AM Reply

I'm sizzling as I get busy.
Sitting on the hob is the chip pan
O! Why did I seat
My flammable rear
At such an inopportune time?

-7-

[10] DarkThirteens 22-Mar-04/10:42 PM Reply

I really enjoyed this poeme. I'm sorry to hear about your story and hope everything works out. -10-

[n/a] AskittlesK › DarkThirteens 23-Mar-04/3:37 PM Reply

yeah... it has so far... Not sure how well the counsualing will go ... but i'll let u know...

[8] Shuushin 25-Mar-04/8:19 PM Reply

I like the flow of it and it stays to the right side of overdone.

You need a title?

how about "Final Cut"

[n/a] AskittlesK 27-Mar-04/10:58 PM Reply

hmm.... I like Final Cut.. hmm.. I'm gonna have to think so more about that but good idea! thanks!

-Angie