poemranker ::China, Silver, and an Emerald Lipstick by Enkidu

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Free verse № 96919

China, Silver, and an Emerald Lipstick

by Enkidu

Member since 2004 · Posted 13 Apr 2004 · 14 comments

Afraid I am, Afraid I stay The wrath of woman night and day Hear my plea I urge of thee Do not embark on Rage's fray She was caught, but she was hot The sun could burn so brightly not I do admit that little fit She threw hampered my clever plot I'll stand alone, right by my phone Waiting for that bitch of stone Just one plate you had to hate You broke upon the wall like bone My priceless wares, now through the air And flying with an ease so fair Preferring blue over emerald hue This love unwrapped by my affairs

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[7] Shuushin 13-Apr-04/6:34 PM Reply
broken here:
"I do admit that little fit
She threw hampered my clever plot"

would rather seen "thrown" not bone rhyme with stone (bone is illogical)

"ease so fair" blows.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 13-Apr-04/6:44 PM Reply
stultus es
[7] Shuushin › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 13-Apr-04/7:03 PM Reply
Stultus est sicut stultus facit...
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Shuushin 13-Apr-04/8:07 PM Reply
Stultus est quisquis stultus est sicut stultus facit inquit.
[n/a] Stephen Robins › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 14-Apr-04/1:05 AM Reply
Brutus est in atrium. Caecilius est in die via.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Stephen Robins 14-Apr-04/8:03 AM Reply
Puellae sub arbore sedent. Subito lupus adit. "eheu!" exclamant.
[4] zodiac › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 14-Apr-04/8:38 AM Reply
Hey, excellent useless mastery of a dead language!

But do you know QBasic?

I do.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › zodiac 14-Apr-04/9:23 AM Reply
Of course I do.
[7] Shuushin › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 14-Apr-04/10:38 AM Reply
a girl sits under a tree and a wolf suddenlycomes - she screams?
[7] Shuushin › Shuushin 14-Apr-04/11:02 AM Reply
cool, thx.
[n/a] Stephen Robins › Shuushin 15-Apr-04/4:25 AM Reply
Salve! permities adulescentum.
[7] deleted user 13-Apr-04/10:07 PM Reply
I want to think of this as you laughing at yourself, you writing a rather silly poem about a deep-felt hurt and making fun of the fact it was your affair that brought it all on.
[7] nentwined 14-Apr-04/5:08 PM Reply
cute.
[7] lexxie100 28-Jun-07/11:57 AM Reply
it's sad that it's so true. well written though.