Free verse № 97482
Moving Forward In Reverse (For Ann)
How long ago did you fall out of love?
How long since he's mattered at all?
Maybe there's something left inside,
hidden among the pain and longing.
You've given up but you won't give in.
Taking the long road to go the short way.
If there's any happy days left to find,
you'll find them when you break your heart.
Standing quietly on the platform,
waiting for a train that never comes.
Sometimes you just have to let go, babe.
Face the things that you fear the most,
if for no other reason than to see.
Always talking to the ghosts of your past.
A waterfall coming faster than before.
We're all afraid of being forgotten,
but you're afraid of being remembered.
Always waiting in the wings and stalling.
Bleeding yourself waiting for a push.
But your room's getting smaller these days,
and you're gonna have to see the world.
Sometimes you just have to let go, babe.
...and don't worry...you'll be fine.
22 comments
Not bad, or wouldn't have gone to the trouble.
Good one.
very good.
you probably have and I've ignored and/or forgotten them, but with the passing of time and memory comes curiosity.
By the way, cool new vote readout on poem details!
The really best way to improve the Top 20 is to solicit totally subjective Top 20 lists from regular users and post them as "User Recommendations" or something such. That would fulfill all the purposes of the current top 20 except 'Winning Poemranker'.
thanks re: readout--just occurred to me, and it's been forever since I did a little bit of java work (these days it's all about the php).
as for the totally subjective top 20 lists, that's... sort of like the 'favorites' list you can set up? Maybe I should add a "browse favorite lists" or something. Or maybe handpick a few folks' favorites for them to "publish".
Hmm.
Want to continue this in suggestions? ;)
zodiac [link to zodiac]
1. Farm animals INTRANSIT Ghazal 5.24;1
2. Waiting Room jessicazee Free verse 5.50;5
3. Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 zodiac Free verse 5.56
4. A country called Cha richa Free verse 5.19
5. The Negro Everyone Free verse 5.17
6. ...So We Stayed In The Water Fear of Garbage Free verse 5.54
7. After seven days in the sun <~> Villanelle 6.67
8. Las Gaviotas Bachus Villanelle 7.64
9. The Gentleman -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. Free verse 6.75
10. Portsmouth belle 2 Garrett S Sexton Free verse 5.91
Dovina
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AlChemy
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silver
And so on. Of course it would be a lot like Favorites, just more accessible to new users unfamiliar with the site. And of course it would be just as arbitrary (and possibly tpbod would make his Top 10 entirely out of his own poems) but that wouldn't matter. It wouldn't claim to be objective; just a new user's guide, made by current or regular users. Anyway, I might just make an unofficial one myself. There's my current Top 10. Any other takers?
Going to Suggestions now...
1. Because as far as other people are concerned, your favorites are automatically arranged newest to oldest.
2. Because a new user on the site looking for good poetry won't know to look at your, AlChemy's, favorites. They will know to click a link for "User's Top 10s" or something such.
3. Because a longer list would be kind of wearying.
4. Because it would encourage people with only a few favorites marked to really stake out their 10 favorite favorites.
5. Because everybody's Top 10s on the same page would have the same effect as a working Top 10 page - ie, you'd see that several people had chosen "Flowers for Monet", by Shuushin, while only thepinkbunnyofdoom had chosen all thepinkbunnyofdoom posts. It would make self-aggradizers more obvious, and force people to think about other posters besides themselves.
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