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The True Irony

Member since 2003 · Posted 25 Apr 2004 · Edited 28 Apr 2004 · 16 comments

Written by Jason ~ James Subconsciously I lay conscious Thinking of This Unaware of my being Drifting from myself Yet fully aware of my pain Chaining me to my misery How can this be? Such Irony I drift away This Suffering Lying perfectly still Buried in Memories Burned Hurting of a love that never existed So why do I miss it Praying for a happiness that can never be Dreaming Then I wake up To Watch the Shattering Some time later Beneath the Silence Screaming of a burning sun There is this Hunger Deafening my already burst ears Forcing me to swallow These fears are merely doubts Doubts I can't put down Closing my eyes Wide Shut To see Beyond this Point With my mouth Wide Open Trying to Scream No Sound arises Curtains Close Lights Fade And I wake from this dream

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16 comments

[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom 25-Apr-04/9:19 PM Reply
This is one of my first co-writes.
[n/a] Stephen Robins › thepinkbunnyofdoom 26-Apr-04/2:49 AM Reply
Enough said.
[8] zodiac › thepinkbunnyofdoom 26-Apr-04/3:34 AM Reply
What a surprise.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26-Apr-04/12:34 AM Reply
You're not supposed to put your own poems in your favourites list.

Well you can, but it makes you a tool.
[7] Shuushin › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 26-Apr-04/1:00 PM Reply
Tool rocks.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Apr-04/9:54 AM Reply
True, but tools are useful and this is only half written by me
[6] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 26-Apr-04/1:17 AM Reply
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WHY TOSS A MULLET?
WHEN DOES THE ACTUAL TOSSING OF THE MULLET BEGIN?
WHAT HAPPENS TO MULLET AFTER THE MULLET TOSS?
HOW MANY PEOPLE USUALLY COME TO THE MULLET TOSS?
WHAT ARE THE RULES FOR TOSSING A MULLET?

Go to http://www.florabama.com/Special%20Events/ Mullet%20Toss/mullet_toss_faq.htm

"Celebrity Tossers at High Noon Saturday"
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 28-Apr-04/9:55 AM Reply
Price of Tea in China?
[8] deleted user 26-Apr-04/7:05 AM Reply
I can feel what's going on here, and for that a 8, but some lines like "eyes Wide Shut" and "Deafening my already burst ears" are snatched or don't make sense.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › deleted user 28-Apr-04/9:57 AM Reply
James's Writing Style Obviously, but they do make sense, they are about overwhelming sensations.
[8] zodiac › thepinkbunnyofdoom 28-Apr-04/10:38 AM Reply
The easy line here would be "Too bad this poem wasn't an overwhelming sensation." I choose the high road.
[7] Shuushin 26-Apr-04/12:58 PM Reply
I just couldn't get my arms around this one. Maybe some line breaks, maybe some compartmentalization - dunno.
[n/a] Bobjim 28-Apr-04/12:12 PM Reply
After reading the comments, I considered reading this.
Then I thought better of it.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › Bobjim 29-Apr-04/10:00 PM Reply
A very wise Idea indeed.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer 29-Apr-04/2:45 PM Reply
This poem is below your over-all writing ability, lil-furry-poofball.. did you regress? Cmon man, would you add some spice and atleast get the tip of my toes to fuckin sizzle?
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › SupremeDreamer 29-Apr-04/10:00 PM Reply
First commet. Think it explained it all. Co-write. My Flavoring laced with there style and expression.