Free verse № 99251
Heat
Powdered bones and mirage
have turned my face away.
This heat, these lines, intersecting
ahead and behind my sun crawl.
Pale, then red to bronze, now brown
Blistering, peeling inside out and beyond
The dunes, sidewinders, mountains perpetually
unreachable, teasing me with safer shadow.
Back skeletal, knees sand papered down
to tendon and nerve. I serve the sky, a left
over lover long of nail and without time
A counter of clouds, a rain dancer on the verge...
Of thunder, or death without song.
5 comments
Manatees bobbing in a display pool
somewhere in the heart of Vegas.
I thought that I was a-blazing,
My blood it was a-boiling,
It was amazing.
watch the periods. they break it up too much, maybe. give me a reason your face has been turned away by these things, as the rest of you is a part of the schema.
maybe not 'death without song' but more so death with an unvoiced sound?
lose the ... on the second to last line. it cheapens the poem. the rest, in my opinion, is nicely done.
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