Re: Only I wish I could say.. by PunkyPanda	nothingtoanyone 65.179.137.73	27-May-04/10:11 PM
Hello my Yello Jell-o just to let you know I'm right here for you and dont let a guy get you down. love always your friend, A. Person
Re: Get it straight by tre	zodiac 65.161.41.48	27-May-04/10:12 PM
Practically every single line of this is wrong. Not surprising, considering your source.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 65.161.41.48	27-May-04/10:17 PM
Ace. I've seen it. "No one escaped" bugged me because people obviously did, or were released, at least, though rarely. I imagine you mean in the figurative sense, or in the sense of the country as a prison. Still, I'd feel better without that bit. As far as I know, the worst of the (now-abandoned) prisons are still sealed off. Isn't that the case?
Re: johnny dowd by the codeine kid	zodiac 65.161.41.48	27-May-04/10:18 PM
Have you ever read this poem out loud?
Re: Horror Film by Jeremi B. Handrinos	zodiac 65.161.41.48	27-May-04/10:21 PM
One of your best in a while. "Wheel chair knight of no table" needs work. I get it now, and would've had an easier time if you'd made wheelchair one word. Maybe hyphenate "knight-of-no-table" as well. Maybe not.
Re: smokestack blues by wilco	SupremeDreamer 204.31.163.155	28-May-04/1:06 AM
Something about this poem bothers me.. I'm not sure why either... which is why I shall refrain from voting.
Re: Horror Film by Jeremi B. Handrinos	SupremeDreamer 204.31.163.155	28-May-04/1:18 AM
I can tell that I'm being ignored. You haven't even ridiculed me for my question, not even a reply with a elongated and false translation to make me the punchline of a joke. Not even a blasted "bow'ls". Have I done something to deserve being tagged as an invisible and horribly grotesque untouchable? I have a gut feeling that I won't get a reply to my question wrapped in childish whining. But anyway, I figure voicing my curiousity is a needed urge, the side-effect of some dismal disease that I endure daily.
Re: Child of Troy by Caducus	zodiac 65.161.41.48	28-May-04/4:52 AM
If you experienced some massive head wound, causing your capacity for thought to become moderately impaired, do you suppose you would believe MORE in God, or LESS? Thanks - Curious in Schenectady, NY
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 217.44.71.241	28-May-04/7:40 AM
Nice try at a villanelle. But please find another subject. I only log in about once a month and there's always a new poem by you on the same damn subject.
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 217.44.71.241	28-May-04/7:42 AM
This is an improvement. Nice observations and a feeling of emptiness at the end that is very well evoked.
Re: My deepest thoughts by poetandknowit	Christof 217.44.71.241	28-May-04/7:50 AM
You posted this on my 30th birthday and very fitting it seems.
regarding some deleted poem...	tadpole 68.170.22.164	28-May-04/10:00 AM
yeah you are gettin up there. . .
Re: How to sleep sitting up by Bachus	Ice 203.76.227.225	28-May-04/10:07 AM
it was good...gave me goosebumps
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.14.235	28-May-04/10:38 AM
oi vey...a guy fucked you. you want something else, even though there was no pinky promise? In the immortal words of Clint Eastwood: Deserve's got nothin to do with it.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	28-May-04/10:45 AM
*very nice* "strung out on chance and cigarettes"
Re: The Bed by Fear of Garbage	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	28-May-04/10:47 AM
at first the numerous "it/its" gave me pause - but with that ending - sets it up very nicely indeed.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	28-May-04/10:52 AM
"Where I used to write letters " might better be, "where I wrote letters" or "where I once wrote letters" and that last line, hmmm - how about "and bleed once more" or something less telegraphed. other than that, as is often said - "ace". Nice tight sentiment.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	28-May-04/11:04 AM
Good stuff KA - I don't know why you got a fricken 2(?) - oh, it was from God's Wife (the East German judge of PR). Last stanza has excellent pop.
Re: smokestack blues by wilco	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	28-May-04/11:01 AM
One of those where I'm not exactly sure what is being said, but I listen intently and am thankful for the conversation. Nicely painted.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	28-May-04/11:11 AM
"And take with you all your bags cause me and her..." Should be "...cause I and her..." but even if grammatically correct, it is still awkward in that context - Maybe you could reword that last sentence?